The Touch of Absence

I have found new life in your absence

although not the life that carries me

not the life that exists outside my door.

I have found that life shines everywhere

I see it in the eyes of people in love

emanating fully and gentle as a child.

There is an abundance of life evolving.

Necessity being the mother of invention

and society advertising every necessity.

New technologies changing each day,

faster and more intelligent they become

they rule the world from your pocket.

I have found new life in your absence

it appears everywhere except within me

the life that was has left along with you.

I am now the empty outlet in the wall,

you were the shining lamp in my grasp

your brilliance gave me my life's purpose.

Now I have found new life without you,

a joyless life of solitude and of loneliness

magnified each time I feel your absence.   

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

This piece is a great juxtaposition of happiness and saddness. You have found "new life", but is it really the life that you want? I have felt this way before...when one door closes, another opens, but the one that opens is not necessarily the beautiful portal that we were expecting. I believe that souls attach to one another, and when one is torn away, there is a sense of missing part of ourselves. Beautifully soulful.

[Astro]

Souls departed or simply in isolation are felt evermore. Thank you for this wonderful review.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

The imagery and longing you display in this one...Astro...the reflective images cast a shadow of their whereabouts...the end line get at the heart of this verse:

Now I have found new life without you,
a joyless life of solitude and of loneliness
magnified each time I feel your absence.

[Astro]

I really wanted to hide my true intentions early on to give more impact to the ending in this one, I'm glad you seem to feel I accomplished this task. Thanks for the review Glen.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

I believe you capture your intent...you're welcome...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"i have found new life" that line promises such hope and rebirth, and then instead we get total emptiness...and that life is all around the speaker but not within..

wonderful poem here, and the metaphor in the next to last stanza is priceless...i wish i had written those lines...

good stuff, Astro.

jacob

[Astro]

Thank you very much Jacob, I don't know where the metaphors come from but I seem to have a knack for them.

[Laminators Dubai]

its not a poem.its a shot...a needle come in and coming out of your skin with pain and that drug....that drug will work later....
another splendid write...
thanks for sharing this....^^

[Astro]

It definitely has some sting to it Glitch, you are right. Thanks for reading and reviewing. :)

[Laminators Dubai]

i glad that i read it...

changes my thoughts....

[Astro]

Well thank you again.