On The Sea of Dreams

This is a 'whale of a tale' but never were words so reflected by truth

Many seasons have passed

While I sat blinded by desire

But I made no notice at all

My eyes were fixed perusing

Somewhere along the horizon

Where I found myself adrift

Time blew through my hair

Then I found myself frozen

Among the Northern ice flows

There, time to me had ceased

Desire and ambition petrified

Disillusionment and regret set

My soul cried tears turned ice

Covering me like a glass case

My ship, shelved by sorrow

 

Winters long arm lifted slowly

After a time light bled through

My eyes held a place beyond

There upon the horizon I spied

What I thought was the dream

The prize that I had lost sight of

The crystal clutches gave way

I felt the swell beneath my feet

Was it a trick of the rising dawn

After all this time could it be real

Not just some wayward iceberg

Then I reached out into the depths

Suddenly I felt a wondrous stirring

A shining white fluke rose up to me

Reaching for it I fell, into a dream 

Author's Note

To my muse

Reviews

[Kristin Lee]

Lots of layers of meaning in this one (like peeling an onion) but very beautiful. Its tranquility and flow are nicely laid/penned. Yet the part about disillusionment slaps you in the face like a salty sea spray bringing you back into the fold making you crave more. And I love the closing line, how you fall into a dream. Great stuff.

[Astro]

I'm very pleased that you were able to find layers and layers of enjoyment in this one. Thanks for the great review Kristin.

[Dana Alsamsam]

i can feel and hear the ebb and flow of the waves massaging the shore in this piece. your command of language is incredible! you use complicated images that seem to make perfect sense the way you present them.

time blowing through your hair...winter's long arm... all amazing personification here. whatever dream you have fallen into, it is serving you well in the way of inspiration. this piece is great!

[Astro]

Why thank you Dana for such a glowing review of my poem, the inspiration was definitely strong and helped to give a great clarity to my artistry. Glad you liked it so much.

[Vile]

Well done man, a very nice poem. I especially liked that second stanza. You had alot of lovely images and scenes to capture and get your readers attention. Great word choice I might add, you mangaged to aid the flow of this piece with great vocabulary, something alot of people struggle with.

[Astro]

Thanks Vile, that's a very nice compliment. I'm glad you liked it.

[Dr. Wood ?]

you certainly have a way with words sir. Poetically searching for poetry..is how I saw it..mind you..I am rubbish at reading into other peoples meanings..But it worked for me, so what the hell?

[Astro]

Thank you Doc, it was most definitely about a search and that which I may have finally found is, truly poetic so you are not wrong. If it had alternate meanings to the reader, I would be just as happy, as long as they enjoyed the writing.

[Troy Henson]

A beautiful piece Astro. The imagery and descriptive format was well done and captivating.
Regards
Troy

[Astro]

Thanks man, it came from a place of true inspiration.

[Mizo4]

the imagery and the flow of this prose was wonderful and captivating, it made my mind see the images you were trying to create even though its 5am mwahahaha.
it's a lovely poem really enjoyed reading it,

[Astro]

Thanks Marion, sorry I haven't found time yet to read your story. I will get to it, but poems are often quicker and so they normally get first attention.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

This was beautiful... "shining white fluke rose up to me/reaching for it I fell, into a dream" -- my favorite part of this piece.

I see this as a lofty metaphor...the idea of a long, cold winter turning to spring through the mystical tale of a whale revealing herself as a handhold toward possibility. I see so many different thoughts in this, but above all else, I see love blooming as a bright star in a dark sky. You write beautifully, and with such emotion.

[Astro]

Thank you, I'm very pleased that you appreciated the different layers of meaning and concepts that I wove into this one. There is definitely something blooming behind my poems inspiration. At least it feels that way.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Or perhaps "breaching"...but it might be a "fluke", so be careful :)

[Astro]

I'll tread lightly upon the water like a man from Nazareth. ;o

[AnnaLeQuinn]

I loved the ending! The words were amazing as well. "The crystal clutches gave way, I felt the swell beneath my feet" love that line. "My ship shelved by sorrow" so good. Amazing writing.
Thank you for sharing your splendid work with me!
Anna

[Astro]

You're very welcome, I'm glad that my words were not lost at sea, as it were but felt in creative waves. ;) Thanks for the wonderful review.