I Sat Like Summer

Summer so vibrant and warm is often wished to be eternally upon us. It's not the length of summer that we remember when it's gone, but how hot it was while it passed.

I sat at your royal table

Honoring you with eyes

That bowed lowering lids

Like an amorous opium rush

While you tried with feigned subtlety

To arrange me like you would flowers

Only you were my Sun and Moon

My light to which I bent

I reached for you hungry

That I might taste in you 

Sacred thoughts of a desire

For me who falls at your feet

Not from weakness of the body

I simply prepared myself for inevitability

The day you fell I would be there

To catch you, your heart safe in my arms

As they burned to white ash holding

Your heat consuming me until nothing

Is left but my taste upon your flesh

My aroma a hanging hummingbird

Light and strobing in and out of existence

A blur of colorful memory which

You once invited to sit at your table

One season of love passed over

While you remain ever the beacon

That guides new passion out of youth

Like poetry out of the formless void

Of spilled ink tattooed on Morpheus

While he puts to sleep those eyes

Dropping softly, like afternoon shadow

Onto the white breasts of Winter pale 

  

Author's Note

I tried to break it up into some sort of free verse form because I didn't like it all together in one alphabetical beast but not sold on the design.

Reviews

[The Verse: A Poetry Jou..]

I f*****g love this, your metaphors are wicked,(to arrange me like you would flowers), this is just simply amazing, I should certainly delve a bit more into your work, I do catch the nature feel, but you make it work!

[Astro]

Thanks a lot Dan, I liked that line too. It actually was the inception of the piece. I had the line/idea floating around in my brain and gave it legs.

[The Verse: A Poetry Journal]

cool. I do that most of the time, it is one line in particular at any random moment that gives life to my work. so I relate, It's a rather powerful line so I see how this came to be!

[Troy Henson]

The design to me was perfect. Nicely done. I thought the flow, the tone and romantic essence was great.
Nice work my friend. A pleasure to read this one.
Regards
Troy

[Astro]

Thanks for the review Troy, glad you enjoyed another of my writings. Peace.

[Sorry Infamous]

I find nothing wrong with the design. I didn't see it when it was all together but I like the break up of them. Each new stanza a new breath, a new moment in the romance, a different month of the Summer if you will...
Some gorgeous lines you penned here...

"For me who falls at your feet
Not from weakness of the body"

and winter a new woman

"Dropping softly, like afternoon shadow
Onto the white breasts of Winter pale"

Wonderfully write.

[Astro]

Thank you for the compliment, and the interesting point of view. You've breathed new life into my day.

[Sorry Infamous]

You are very welcome. Thanks for sharing your work!

[Jack...]

Romance, you've penned it my friend. Very nicely done. I could feel the love screaming from this write.

[Astro]

Thanks Jack.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

The thing that struck me about this one was the imagery and word choice...truly moving. I love the metaphorical significance that I found in this one as well; the way that it made me think of writing and the soul. The only thing that stuck out for me as a sore thumb (only a small one) was the capitalization of the first lines...my eyes kept getting drawn back to those large first letters--could be the font. Anyway, on a whole I truly enjoyed this one my friend.

[Astro]

I'm glad you were moved by these words that I've written. I tend to capitalize the first letter of all lines in most of my work. It's more of a habit than a style, but that I do it so often kind of makes it a style in it's own I guess. Thanks again.

[Kristin Lee]

Another favorite :)

The flow is so smooth and the content is absolutely stunning. The imagery is captivating. You really hit it out of the park with this one.

[Astro]

Thanks Kristen I must be starting to hit my stride at the moment, or maybe just reached a new level anyhow. Very happy you liked it.

[Rahul]

A good sense of poem you made this time. Starting as well as your ending both're nicely penned, each stanza's nicely penned. It's a beautiful and realistic work by you.
great job !

[Astro]

Thanks Rahul for the kind review.

[quinfinn]

this one assaults and satiates all the senses, from top to bottom and start to finish...brilliant metaphor and some very convincing imagery make for a superbly crafted poem. thumbs way, way up!

[Astro]

Thanks a lot Quin that's a resounding review I quite enjoyed.

[quinfinn]

deserved!

[Dr. Wood ?]

this drips off the tongue my friend...No hiccups at all...wonderful content that fired up all the senses...Great stuff

[Astro]

Thanks Doc, I've been procrastinating a bit too much in my trying to balance a social life with my writing, so this feels nice that I wrote another good piece.

[Dr. Wood ?]

not easy to balance two separate worlds....I try to do it all the time..but you cannot put a schedule to inspiration

[Astro]

No, but the beast must be loosed from time to time even if its difficult to reel in and contain.

[s y e]

This was great! Loved the wording and the structure of the write. You write with such honesty and the flow is great. It reads with no bumps. Perfection.

~ Noodle.

[Astro]

You're so very kind Noodle, I'm happy you enjoy my work. Thank you.