A Wishful Wedding Journey

Two pairs of green eyes

And nervous hands

A beautiful gown 

And wedding bands

His smile meets mine

And his hands still shake

His eyes are wet

And his body quakes

His shoulders are broad

And his intentions pure

His thoughts roam-

And his mind endures

The music starts

Like he's been waiting for hours

I take my first step 

In my dress and flowers

So many emotions

At the release of the doves

Like spending the rest of our lives

With the one that we love

Author's Note

Honest reviews, good or bad, I can take it!

Reviews

[Follan]

Dear Ms.Hemstock,

You have described the feelings of a bride and groom finely. Thank you.



~Follan

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice description of the thoughts and emotion of a wedding day. I believe a day for nerves also. In a few words stated. Two people will bond forever. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Sami Khalil]

Sweet and hopeful with the majesty of the wedding...Excellent...:).......

[annabellee]

that's such a sweet poem, nice rhyming, I really enjoyed it :)

[Samuel Dave]

Well if u can really take it, here goes. All in all the poem's great, but my version would have ended like "with the one we can cope", Perfect rhyme, right?

[sakshi arora]

i liked it good emotion i really liked the beginning and 2nd last paragraph.just improvise on your last paragraph and the line shoulders are broad ,intentions pure

[Shawn Purcell]

Great use of rhyme scheme. There are even a lot of subtle traces of off rhyme. Perhaps even where you didn't intend.