Singular Night Sky

What unite us together?

Across a salty sea, beyond ten harsh battle lines,

There is a child, who sees the moon and the entire night skies,

Past two tiny islands, cluttered inside a city,

A slum kid raises his head to see stars sparkling, bright and pretty,

West of the Atlantic, past three mountain tops,

A young girl stares through a telescope, on the roof of her father’s ice cream shop,

They all admire the beauty,

Transcendent in their eyes,

Not understanding their unity, created by a singular night sky.

Author's Note

Writing makes me happy

Reviews

[KAREN]

Your poem makes me happy! It is a breathtaking piece and the imagery is like art.

[Moonrose]

Oh I enjoyed this a lot! The picture caught my eye; I'm a sucker for that sort of thing, so kudos on reeling me in with that. :P But reading the actual poem made me smile as well! Short and sweet, with just the right vocabulary, and a wonderful message that will always deserve to be relayed! Good job :)

[David W Moore III]

We are all under the same sky. Now if we could just see eye to eye...

[Sseoni]

I really liked this poem. It had a great moral to it and the imagery was great! It was an enjoyable read! :D

[Stacy]

THIS particular piece was a nice one. Showing how everyone is underneath the same sky [actually in a song once]......I am digging this piece of writing due to that fact.

*Note: Writing is a way of letting everything out and it seems that you enjoy it, so congrats on the emotion that you try to put within it.*

Be well.

[~Death Is The Key~]

i agree with ~DeathEnchanted~ about your poem and stuff.

[A]

Awww...love this! I love the descriptions and the imagery. The storyline is adorable. Great poem! I don't think you should change a thing. Sometimes the shortest, sweetest poems are the best! :)

[SilentDreamer]

Interesting. Um, I like the idea and that's why I kinda think you should add on to it a bit. Maybe, just my opinion. Other than that it's okay. Okay job. Keep writing.
P.S. Thank you for your "Awkward" review.