Musings

I'm just playing with words. This is my first work. I haven't written in a loooonnnngggg time !

 

Sitting down wondering about the day past

I grab a pencil

wishing I could capture all my thoughts

rushing and whizzing by

fast as water that's out to sea

sharp as rocks piercing thru white foam

deadly as lava erupting from within

soft as rose petals whispering their secrets

teasing as dewdrops that disappear

with the sun rising

powerful as lighting striking

the already battered earth

noisy as birds twittering

silent as dark forest shadows

 

These are my musings

uncontrollable

unnoticeable

trapped inside my head

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

I guess be honest ; tips are welcome; i can't write but i thought i would try anyways. I corrected spelling errors. I forgot to use spell check early this morning.

Reviews

[Gracie-San]

This is exactly how I feel when I sit down and write, but I don't think I could express it in such a beautiful and simplistic form that you could.

I also love your use of descriptions in this poem. I feel as if it adds to the emotions most writers feel when they sit down and begin to write their muse.

[carmz]

nice one">

[Undying Glory]

wonderful arrangement of words, really deep poem, methinks. very good

[James Watts]

I enjoy any work that can transport away from the stress of this world. And this piece has done that. Nice work

[Chassitie Linnaea Nicol..]

love it

[little lily Bride of Ch..]

any one can write each writers work is differnet in their own way of Expressing Beauty for some one that can't write you do a Amazing job i love it going in my Library ! nice work

[Kat Plunkett]

good write :)

[Jenny Nelson]

Sounded great to me. Honest and artful renderings. Nice job!

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

Hey firstly get that absurd thought out of your mind that you cant write i think this is very interesting...it very nicely put across in words the interplay of thoughts and how difficult it truly is to put them in clear words.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

I like the descriptions in this poem. The images all stand alone, but fit together like patchwork. You used a good technique to pull it all together. Nice work!

[Devons]

Explosions of images going off inside the head - the way it really is. But on the outside you can't tell.
Nice piece of work. Well-described and well-delivered. Reassuring.