Jack & Jill

A poem about the harsh reality of drug taking. I am in the position to comment, don't worry.

You read of Jack,

You read of Jill,

All because they swallowed a pill,

All of a sudden they get a shock;

All because their breathing stopped,

They try to cling on to the walls

But all of a sudden they take a fall,

Shame about Jack,

Shame about Jill,

Guess they shouldn't of taken that pill.

Author's Note

Hope you enjoy, criticise if you may.

Reviews

[Emma. :)]

One of my favourites.

[Laura E. Aranda]

All because there breathings stopped,

you meant: their
and maybe the word: breathing without the 's'

I liked it though! I read it aloud and it was cute! cheers, lea

[WordMaster]

What an interesting way to approach this subject matter

Very creative and imaginative

[Tickle me not]

I know the subject is not supposed to be funny but I may have laughed a little inside =(.
Drugs are bad, mmkay! Shame on Jack and Jill!
Thanks for sharing!

[Lady Lazarus.]

this is fantastic.
very witty and sad yet very funny too.
a piece of great comedy.