Chances

Everyone's got a line, I'm trying to change her so she doesn't cross that line.

Am I dumb?

With you I feel happy

Yet you dig yourself 

Deeper and deeper

into a hole

Bad influence 

Poor choices

Am I stupid?

Because I am still here

Talking to you

Liking you 

And forgiving you

You shows sincerity

Want to change

Knows what you did was wrong

You want to change 

Yet you go and do things

Stupid things

     And

I still like you

I'll still give you chances

But there's a line 

A line that I've drawn

A line I will Never Push back

Please don't cross that line

Because in doing so

I will have to let you go.

 

Author's Note

life lol

Reviews

[barleygirl]

It's never easy to tell the difference between putting up with too much of someone's BS & sticking around to support a friend. I think we each have our limits. Some will take it for a while, then let go. Others can take it much longer than I ever could. But broken people need love, too, & they're often very hard to love. Your poem is exquisite in showing this inner turmoil over where to draw the line (((HUGS)))

[NhanHoang]

yeah, she needs love too, that's why she's coming to the homecoming dance with a guy, lol this is funny, but thank you for your comment I hope you have a great day lol

[willbradley]

Good writing, though there is a line that is confusing/ possible not what you intended to say? "A line that draw". Did you mean, "A line that I've drawn?"

Anyway, I think this is very relatable. That said, it feels like the narrator is stewing in the juices of an unhealthy relationship.

Your work shows a strong connection, and the difficulty in making a choice, but it also feels like they know the end is coming anyway, without attempting to resolve the situation. It's a bit frustrating to read in that context to be honest. But It's a common predicament, so maybe that's the point?

I guess I am saying that based on the first line, the narrator seems to already know what they should be doing, and instead of doing it, they're projecting, but it feels more like whining because they aren't seeking answers. They already have them. They just want to vent.

[NhanHoang]

woah, Thank you, and I had no idea what I really was writing, and yes, I was just venting, I'm not really going to do anything yet, well actually I know what I have to do, and that is forgiveness and be patient because I once was a jerk but I change so I must give others chances and forgiveness, Thank you for your comment : )

[willbradley]

Cool! I didn't realize this was based on real experience. If that's the case, I hope my commentary wasn't too personal. Best of luck with your situation! And gain, thanks for sharing. Being real makes it more valuable I think.

[NhanHoang]

yes lol, its like real, but no harm done, well maybe a little but I learn, I grow, its all I care about, thank you for your comment, and yes, being real makes it good.

[willbradley]

Oh man, I'm sorry if I offended. Glad you didn't seem to take it to hard. Looking forward to more work from you!

[NhanHoang]

yup, ok now let me go read a few of your poems lol