The Idiot's Idea

To explain poems, like art, music or film is contradictory to the process.. to illicit a reaction. Therefore I will skip the surface. My theme here is how do we harness creativity and inspiration?

 

To start with a thought

     A daring task it seems 

          Seeds of imagination

               Roots to inspiration

 

Curious why you cease

     Oblivious to its being

          Life ending so tragic

               Ignorant to the magic

 

Yet still it carries on

     No age, nor fear, nor time

          Complicated from its core

               Sophisticated without law

 

Language heard silently

     In crowded empty rooms

          Loud to innocent ears

               Our clever youthful tears

 

To avoid its power unwise

     Never escaping a regret

          Tonight’s demand in short

               Question what has been taught

 

Left to rest in comfort

     A sleepless spiral proceeds

          Visions splinter the eyes

               Fatal reaction, our surprise

 

 

Author's Note

Any criticism welcomed!

Reviews

[Muse]

First off welcome to writerscafe. I would not have known about you without you paying my work a visit..so thank you.

I need to point out one line in particular:
Visions splinter the eyes. Well said....when inspired....creativity can come at you like flying fragments of mosaic art. The voices in your heading can be like shards of glass...cutting into the brain...synapses firing off the ink pen within. High scores.

Muse

[Polaroid Impossible]

Thanks so much. You absolutely nailed it.. And may I say your work is amazing. You write with such a natural flow.

B

[Dai Hanshou]

I love your metaphors!
'In crowded empty rooms.'
The first part reminds of the growth of a nurtured plant, seeing the world - regardless of time.

[Red Brick Keshner]

First up, I am happy to see this poem on-a-page. It looks like a poem should look. And more than that, its essence and lines provide the reader the structure for imagination and description. It succinctly outlines the creative process which most writers are familiar with. Splintering vision is a massive concept-image, aptly incorporated and utilised in the poem. Thank you for sharing it with us.

[pumpkin head]

Noe this one captivated my immagation. I really liked the imagery,
the set up and the way it flows. Awesome!

[Eloha]

You have a good mind, daft and original. How do Aussies say "gooday mate" in poetry?

[L0v3craft]

beautiful.

i'm sorry, but that's all i can say for this piece :)

[Madelyn Defray]

Very eloquently written.

[TheJordBaker]

I really like this piece, everything from the message, the flow to the layout. top work :)

[Serenity Faith]

This piece packs a powerful punch to one's thought process...The rhythm was superb. Very nicely executed ^_~

[Tattered Teddy]

"In crowded empty rooms" is a bloody brilliant line in a very well put-together piece of work! I love this structure you have going here, never seen anything quite like it.

[Polaroid Impossible]

Thanks. I like finding new ways to rhyme. I would rather break some rules than be boring. Cheers!

[Alpris]

I love the way you structured this, makes it an interesting read as well as attractive to the reader. Powerful words, too; comes from the wise.
Well done.

[Polaroid Impossible]

I'm glad you enjoyed it. Please keep an eye out for more to come :)