Hey Dad

A Girl's Song for her dead father

The Winter in the Hills are lonely, Dad.

Only if you could warm my little palms in your hand.

And talk me stories of faraway land, till I sleep.

I wish I could just pretend to sleep in your arms,

To feel your good night kiss, as you tuck me in the blankets.

The Winter in the Hills are still lonely, Dad.

It’s almost December time. Cold chills my frail bones.

My friends and their families have already flocked to plains.

Every Evening, Mother and I await watching the dusk.

The Sun slowly sneaks below the hills behind the thick fog.

And tiny lights from the valleys spread the dull sparkle

Only if you were there, you could take us to the Plains.

Did I tell you how perfect Mother has been?

She grew me into this wonderful young girl.

She walks with me through the winding lanes

Till the Church, the open wide white benches

Often we sit there and talk all about you.

I know your smile, Dad. And your dark brown hair

Mother still blushes when she describes you.

The Winter in the Hills then feels so warm.

If you are up there listening to your little girl.

Dad, not all is gloom here, I must tell you.

Yes, Mother is in fifties and has grown old now.

But I have taken up the responsibilities.

Together, we are making up quite a pair.

Looks like brighter days are just around the corner.

Here is a secret I want to share with you, Dad.

I have finally found a man to share my life.

His manners, his smile and the twinkle of his eyes

All reminds me of you. I hope you’ll like him too

One day when he becomes a young daddy,

He will be just like you, loving and caring.

Well, now your little princess is going to sleep.

Her eyes aches of tiredness and the cold,

Will you stay awake and watch me till I sleep.

It makes me feel better to know I’m loved.

And when I’m asleep, slowly walk into my dreams.

The Winter in the Hills will feel warm again.

Reviews

[AllenS]

So very delicate and beautiful. I like the letter style, it caries a deep personal reflective tone. Yes there is a hint of sadness, a touch of longing, but the poem does not stay there. There is deep appretiation, love and new horizons. A simply wonderful offering.

[Abhishek Izy]

Thank you Allen, that was a kind, sweet and very insightful review. It makes me so happy when it touches the heart of people irrespective of the race and geographic variance. Of course it’s about a bond which is so universal yet when it reflects so profoundly all across, it just makes me feel a winner as an artist.

Thank you so much!!

[Onlyme]

I was really moved by this beautiful piece of writing. Deeply touching and emotional. Heartfelt ride into this young girl life to growing old. Talking to her father. To make her feel close and find comfort in doing so, connected to him again. The bond of a father and child is deep. Like a profound eulogy leading up to his death and beyond.

[Abhishek Izy]

Thank you so much Dawn. This piece is very close to me despise of the fact that I am neither a father nor a daughter.

I find my solace in this piece. I’m so happy that you had a look into it

Thank you so much

[Onlyme]

my pleasure. I too. really enjoyed this. It speaks volumes about undying love, compassion, faith and closeness of souls. No matter what.

[Lavi]

I love poems that tell short stories in them. The way you can see it all as if you are there with the speaker, to feel what they feel, and long for what they do. My head will always be in the clouds if it means I will continue to perceive the world in different lenses like this.

[Abhishek Izy]

Such a beautiful perception you gave in this review. Didn't think about it before. You must have mixed feelings at this one (since it indulges in daughter - father relationship) , but I'm glad you dared reading it

[Lavi]

Perhaps a little bit but I am able to seperate my personal perspectives forged by such experience when viewing the lives of other people's perspectives. It is refreshing really, and I'm glad I dared reading it as well :)

[Abhishek Izy]

That shows how well you have designed yourselves to deal with the issues of past.

[Lavi]

:) Thank you. Slow working but I've set my mind to self improvement despite the pain of the past. To be a better person, yet be able to confront my past without clouding the future with it.

[Mihika_d]

You have wonderfully described the close bonding between a father and his daughter. It literally was about to bring tears in my eyes. I'm spellbound!

[Abhishek Izy]

This makes me absolutely happy to hear this. Especially since you're a girl and the feeling swept into you.
As an artist, I could want nothing more than such kind beautiful review. Trust me Mihika, you made my day

[Mihika_d]

😊 Have a wonderful day ahead!

[Anjeline]

Nice work. You have shown the attachment of a daughter with his father beautifully and also at the same time shown how she matures to herself becoming a mother and a responsible daughter. Wonderfully written and expressed.

[Abhishek Izy]

Thank you sooo much for such kind review Anjeline. As I said before, this piece is utterly close to me and it makes me so happy to find people relating to it. It’s such a beautiful and utterly sensitive relationship. Thank you again 😊😊

[Anjeline]

You're welcome:)

[Lyn Anderson]

Very sentimental and sweet. Longing but not bitter. Well done
Minor grammar suggestions (talk to me of faraway lands, OR tell me of faraway lands)
His eyes ache (not aches)

[Abhishek Izy]

Totally appreciate your honest review and a little bit of grammatical correction you tried.
First suggestion, though the sentence is right , I'd still say its not about grammar, rather a poetic license. Second, I'm glad you pointed it out but no I ain't changing that either.
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Talk refers to the act of interpersonal communication through speaking. So if you say:

Talk to me!
This would imply that the person is not speaking or communicating with you to you ( - otherwise you would not need to say it!).

Tell me!
on the other hand, means tell me the information. With the verb tell, the person you are telling is the indirect object of the verb, and the information the direct object. So if someone just says tell me, it means tell me your information.
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Thank you again, much appreciated!!

[Lyn Anderson]

Suggestions are meant to be suggestions. I shan't debate your grammar "we'll speak of faraway lands" sounds softer, but if you wish to" talk me" poetic licence so be it. Thou doth protest too much - when critiques come from a gentle place, one's response, even if disagreeing, should match the tone and spirit of the suggestion. It is a lovely poem, have a nice day.

[Abhishek Izy]

Thank you again for your time Lyn!!

[duck]

beautiful poetry so clearly put. father figure in poetry. looking forward to next work. thanks for sharing.

[Abhishek Izy]

It just me happy and delighted with the review. An emotion around parents are so powerful that it’s almost universal irrespective of what geography one belong and I am glad it resonates in you

[ExposedSiren]

I thought this was incredibly beautiful, and easy to connect to, yet distant enough to feel unique and strange. Thoroughly enjoyed this. Thank you.

[Abhishek Izy]

Thank you for such a kind review. It encourages it to better the craft for sure

[Sneh]

This piece is very emotional and touching. The way nature got space is simply beautiful.... Your words made me love my father more and feel proud of him !!
Good night :)