Sick & Paranoid

A pop culture insight into a mind so confused at its failures that it keeps looping back to itself with no progression whatsoever.

Night looks so dead, like it feels so cold in my head,

Ahead, looks so dark & growing. I better run instead.

Panting, I do. True, yet still standing, not understanding.

Confused like my brain's starving, and time is f*****g warping.

The madness in me is crowning.

Frowning, I break in all sweat.

F**k me, I'm maybe Sun-downing.

Life wasn't straight, yet great. Like it was just yesterday.

Yay, was lil fun. Now clearly undone,the bullet's outta gun.

Its crazy, all I thought. I definitely wasn't hitting home run.

Standing I'm and yet so falling in,

Sin, god damn its crawling on my skin.

And I looks so fucked,and its still f****n

Honey, must say,you looked like a shooting star, from so far.

And f**k then I wished, till you flew closer. An inferno at war.

See, and you blew on me. And now ain't stoppin f*****g my scar.

Trailblazing, like the northern lights.

Strikes, from the heights. I'm so dead,

yet it fights.All's left is what you bled.

And now you're so cold. And stare, not that you f****n care.

Bare. And naked, I wriggle and crawl in front of a thousand glare.

Caught in some festival of hell, pretending like it aint no fair.

I crib, while you walk out with some millionaire.

Maybe I'll shut up now, trying somehow

Allow, to settle in some peace. And now,

As you leave me in smoke, I wish thee Ciao!!

Reviews

[Gee]

Well, a bit of a jumble when read and cursing for cursing same it seems.
Might be better if you picked the bones out of this one, shortened it and had some sort of flow from start to finish. That being said, and it's only my opininion, you can tell me to sling my hook.
Good afternoon Abhishek, happy New year to you.

[Abhishek Izy]

Thank you for your constructive feedback and Happy New Year to you as well Gee!!

Actually, it wasn't intended to be poem if you see the genre I've been trying on.. But i totally appreciate your feedback and I'll pay heed to it :)

[Rye]

GOODNESS!!! Such strong angry words written in this, but the feelings were there

[Abhishek Izy]

Thank you my friend and apologies for not marking it as “mature” content wise. That the lame me but I’m happy that you grasped it, cuz as I mentioned earlier in review feedback that this is experimental pop culture rap kinda stuff and not everyone would like the totally interrupted and crude narration. I owe you big time!!