Wind Dancer .. a Ukiah

Wind Dancer .. a Ukiah

A Poem by Neville

Wind Dancer .. a Ukiah

 


High o’er those primrose banks


kites dance on thermals


Without a care in the wild ..

© 2022 Neville


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Whether in my garden or in the marina, I sit back and watch the Red Kites as they grace the air. You can hear them whistle. And then there are the other type of kites which kids and bigger kids fly. I like them too. Both are fascinating and relaxing to watch. Wind Dancers they are indeed. They have the freedom of the sky. I like your back to front 7/5/7 Neville, and your play on words.

Chris

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

2 Years Ago


then most kindly I thank thee
from afar my dear friend
Tis the way of the word.. read more



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Whether in my garden or in the marina, I sit back and watch the Red Kites as they grace the air. You can hear them whistle. And then there are the other type of kites which kids and bigger kids fly. I like them too. Both are fascinating and relaxing to watch. Wind Dancers they are indeed. They have the freedom of the sky. I like your back to front 7/5/7 Neville, and your play on words.

Chris

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

2 Years Ago


then most kindly I thank thee
from afar my dear friend
Tis the way of the word.. read more
'wind Dancer..a Ukiah'
Neville,
Thank you for this fine poem. I am tickled to see a new style; (at least to me.)
The subject of freedom is so nice and it sure does fit well with the rhythm of
this Ukiah style. You have inspired me with your teaching comment below!

Joy calls out to depth of soul.
Tenuous moments
Hope reaches to be embraced.

Bless you,
Kathy Van Kurin

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

2 Years Ago


Bless you Kathy, your presence on any of my pages here is a blessing in itself and for that,.. read more
Excellent poem, Neville...thermals and kites go together....without one there is not the other...I love it
barbie



Posted 2 Years Ago


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Neville

2 Years Ago


Bless you Barbie you are a real doll ... Neville :) x
I loved the poem Neville. I want to do a verbal poetry with this one. The words danced with perfect movement. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry. I did like this one.
Coyote

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

2 Years Ago


I am more than merely honoured by the words you leave here Coyote .. much more my Friend .. .. read more
Coyote Poetry

2 Years Ago

An amazing poem Neville and you are welcome.
To ride the thermals a picture of grace no matter what the vessel.
Maybe time to get the kids a kite


Posted 2 Years Ago


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Neville

2 Years Ago


.................. precisely .. thanks Cherrie P :)
Cherrie

2 Years Ago

I'll tell you a secret to flying a kite with your granny (who willnot run with it) I tie it to a fis.. read more
Neville

2 Years Ago


indeed a kite in flight is a luverly sight, unless ya flying by moonlight in the middle of t.. read more
The Ukiah is frequently referred to as the reverse Haiku a Ukiah‘s main characteristics are as follows .. at its most basic, it is:
• Stanzaic: one tercet (three-line stanza)
• Syllabic: 7/5/7 across the three lines
• Rhymed: the rules determined by the creator (Robert Ropars) mentions rhyming lines, so maybe it could also be aba?)
• Titled



Posted 2 Years Ago


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Gee
I think the high flying, carefree kite is us as kids this then becoming the adult us when it hits the ground, has the wind taken from it.
I cannot for the life of me do haiku

Posted 2 Years Ago


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Neville

2 Years Ago


I'm write there with ya Gee .. cheers mate .. hope you n the gang are all safe & well up the.. read more
Your idea is good but this is not haiku. I'm not going to school you here. Message me if you want me to let you know what the form has to have. Or just Google haiku

Posted 2 Years Ago


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Neville

2 Years Ago


in literal terms, you are of course correct & I thank you for your very kind offer .. howeve.. read more
William Michael Reeves

2 Years Ago

Then I'm glad I saved the lesson. If I had known you were shaving I would have realized the syllable.. read more
this reminds me of a video i have seen
of a plastic grocery bag dancing in the wind
your words this video perfect match
well written and thank you for prompting memory

google 'american beauty' movie bag in the wind

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

2 Years Ago


thank you for checking in keith .. I shall go check out said plastic bag as soon as I have l.. read more
Sounds like the middle of January in Gujarat. Nicely done!

Posted 2 Years Ago


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Neville

2 Years Ago


might I suggest you close all the windows and doors and turn the dial on the front of your r.. read more
Fabian G. Franklin

2 Years Ago

Gujarat, India holds an International Kite competition. They have a name for it that I can't remembe.. read more
Neville

2 Years Ago



ah' now I get ya .. I was referring to the 'red tailed kite' or 'falco milvus' ....... read more

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Added on April 25, 2022
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