On the Cusp of a Sneeze ..

.............. every now and then, its the little things that get to ya .... maybe

On the Cusp of a Sneeze ..

 

You were once, as much a part of me

as the blue vein

which still passes through my neck

on the long

convoluted journey back to my heart ..

Yet, without you

and that constant pulse and flow, I may

as well be nothing ..

But while I still have breath, I shall

always be that

faint glimmer of golden light at the

end of all your

darkest tunnels, which now of course

surrounds your shadow ..

And yes, that barely discernible tremor

and deep sigh too

regardless, of whether you breathe deeply

or shallow, plus that

tingle in your nose, upon the cusp of a sneeze ..

Of course, I shall always

be the smell and the taste of your mother’s

home cooking

carried to you, on a cool welcome breeze ..

Indeed, I shall be

all things desirous, both protective

and bright ..

Like a heavy quilted down blanket on a cold

winter night ..

Yes, I like to think you might sometimes

remember things

such as these, contained in my promise to thee ..

Whenever you might

just be passing my love .. occasionally maybe ..

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[mou]

Poems write for their love', its beauty, and the shimmer of their cheeks but you----
'... I shall always
be the smell and the taste of your mother’s
home cooking
carried to you, on a cool welcome breeze ..'
Probably that's why it is being said that many writes can catch our eyes and hold the heart but only few can touch the core with their simplicity and originality.
❤
- mou

[Neville]

what a wonderful chat up line .. I'll take it and save it with many thanks and eternal gratitude ❤

Neville

[mou]

You're so kind, Neville ❤ It is my pleasure to read your works
- mou

[Neville]

.............................. thanks again - mou :)

[Arundass TP]

A deep imagination. Excellent way you wrote. I can visualize each line of your poem. Good work

[Neville]

Thank you so very much Arundass, I am truly most grateful to you sir .. Neville

[Papaya]

Your writing always makes me feel nostalgic for days gone by.
Lovely as always, Neville. Top marks my friend.

[Neville]

what a lovely thing to say Ana I can't thank you enough :)

[Ken Simm.]

Only you could write a beautiful poem called this.

[Neville]

Get outa here .. but thanks a bundle Ken .. Neville

[Betty Hermelee]

A beautiful tribute to the one you loved and lost, but not forgotten….and as long as you have breath you will remember important moments together….i will still protect you as I did before…..I shall be with you through the darkest tunnels…I promised you little things that would make you happy like putting a heavy quilted down blanket on a cold night…and I promise to protect you…. I hope you remember things as I do…a faint glimmer of hope.
Brilliant write Neville
Warmly, B
Warmly, B

[Neville]

you just helped to make the whole exercise worthwhile, many thanks indeed my friend ..
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you just helped to make the whole exercise worthwhile, many thanks indeed my friend ..

Neville :)

[Betty Hermelee]

I’m very happy, and it’s my pleasure
Warmly, B

[Soren]

"You were once, as much a part of me
as the blue vein
which still passes through my neck
on the long
convoluted journey back to my heart"
So much within this one statement. A vein still carrying blood but depleted of oxygen. Could blue be taken for sad? A long convoluted journey that may eventually return to the heart. The metaphor of pulse and flow fit in so well. Such wistful memories that one wishes are mutual. There is such a feeling of loss yet hopefulness in this poem. Lovely Neville.

[Neville]

My word, that'll do nicely .. Very nicely indeed ..

Bless you Soren & true .. Neville

[Chris Shaw]

This is incredibly beautiful poetry Neville. Touches the heart strings. Pleased I was able to catch this one again, second time round. What a memory for detail you have in these lines. Quite extraordinary.

Chris

[Neville]

the fact you came back for seconds just put a smile back on my miserable face .. thank you so much Chris .. Neville

[Chris Shaw]

Pleased that upside down is now the right way up Neville. 🙂

[Thomas W Case]

Beautiful work. I've missed your writing.

[Neville]

Cheers Thomas, how kind & muchly appreciated .. Neville

[Patricia Wedel]

Yes… we need Nourishment to ❤️ love…
tenderly, Pat

[Neville]

thank you and truly dear Pat .. though gently and ever so ❤️

[Patricia Wedel]

A most beautiful Poem… dear Neville… “On the Cusp of a Sneeze” describes the Autumn Breeze of Life and 💕 Love. tenderly, Pat

[W. Barrett Munn]

+1 for disirous.
At the same time, I've always hated to see "thee".
But at the moment, I need to find a tiss--shoo!

W.

[Neville]

+ 1 grabbed my attention for starters and then it just got better n better, so I thank thee & then some, sincerely ++