Out of Mind

Out of Mind

 

If I cannot see you

Then you no longer exist

…

So I burn all the photos

And I delete all the texts

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The candles are weeping

But they are suitably snuffed

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Yet still I hope, beyond hope

That you know you are loved

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Yes now you can go

You can do as you please

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You can dance, you can laugh

You can love, now eternally free..

 

 

Reviews

[emmajoy]

Like your owl, seems some emotions go with the snuffing out of candles, first fading then disappearing in a huff and puff of smoke. A quick death, making room for a happier and/or more contented 'otherness' .
Except memories, perhaps. As always you inspire thought to think kindly.

[Neville]

.......... thank you for considering these words emmajoy, as always a much appreciated visit .. please excuse the late reply, I have been very busily otherwise engaged ... Neville

[mattavelli]

Hello, Neville! :)
I think this is a really beautiful mixture of symbolism and feeling.
Thanks for sharing.

[Neville]

........ thank you for visiting not only this but the other five posts you have kindly left your mark on this very evening ............... Neville

[Robert Trakofler]

yeah, I tried that too brother Nev, it didn't work and the tears are still running down the candle what a perfect gut-wrenching line... poignant in brevity, as usual, your gift for this is just mind-boggling

[Neville]

Neva listen to Nev .. read him by all means but .. neva listen to him ......... thanks for providing a platform for my written response Rob .. I have waited yonks for the opportunity to say that ........Muchly appreciated and then a little bit more :)

[Fay Slimm]

Expounded with imagery to sigh for in this expression of non-judgemental love dear Nev. - -- another gem to add to your collection of letting go the best way - though Ii felt the pain.

[Neville]

... you are indeed far too kind dear Fay ... thank you bigly :)

[Ardra]

Death is a form of ultimate freedom...
But for those who remain left behind a truth hard to accept..lovely poem N.
Have a wonderful day!

[Neville]

what wise and wonderful words you have left me .. thank you kindly Ardra .. and you too :)read more
what wise and wonderful words you have left me .. thank you kindly Ardra .. and you too :)

[Chris Shaw]

Whoa!! I thought out of sight out of mind. Burned photos, deleted texts. That isn't easy to do if you love someone. Then I thought about those candles, suiitably snuffed, so final.

Then I read some of your other responses and I have to agree with Jacob. This sounds very much to me like an affair with a single woman to me. Someone who wants more than she can have because he is already married.

A release I think.

Excellent metaphor here Neville. I like the couplets and subtle rhyme.

Clever title too. It could mean two things the way I read it.

Well writ my friend. BTW. Your new avatar is super. The camouflage is incredible. Couldn't see the grey owl at first.

Chris

[Neville]

Ha .. the chance would be a fine thing Chris :) and anyway, wots a meta for eh' if not to use and confound ....... I like the fact you dig the title and found the owl too ...............

Neville

[Chris Shaw]

You can get away with murder with them met o fours Neville. Dug all the poem but especially the wise old owl looking at me :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

she is free, he isn't....love can be like that---we let go and hold on at the same time.
j.

[Neville]

its amazing how we manage to do just that isn't it .. touch and go throughout time .. wouldn't ya think we might learn .....
cheers jacob.
N.

[Einstein Noodle]

V3 can't be any better than that ..the metaphor is so ......perfect ....... the candle is weeping ..yet snuffed .. pretty fine stuff Nev! we do recover and other candles in time may light a different pathway but but the tracks and traces of those tears of wax remain .. i love it .. very different for you .. this one .. couplets bits of rhyme here and there .... to me this speaks to the sadness of loss and hope in something more than this life .. where our Faith takes us .. :) peace and joy good friend ... and down yer neck!
E.

[Neville]

.......... I just can't thank you enough Gene .. I do so look forward to you visiting my scribbles .. peace and joy back at ya and down your neck too :)

N.

[Poetic Beauty]

Ahh the last line is so sad and it hurts my heart. Makes me think of a great love that has moved on to the other side or for me Heaven.

[Neville]

.... you might well be write PB... maybe .. perhaps .. gonna thank you regardless ...

[Poetic Beauty]

It always amazing me how each person that reads a poem has a different take on it because of our own thoughts and life experiences

[Neville]

..................... absolutely .. me too