Satori

Satori

 

As I sit and watch you

Re-arrange your winter shawl

I wonder where have all the warm tones gone

 

Then I skipped a bead and suddenly

Arrived at the conclusion, I now spend far too long

On these old temple steps, dreaming of your little harbour ..

 

 

Reviews

[Lorry]

The feel of you watching her feels of memory or perhaps old photographs Nev, reliving past times in your mind of when two people were together, or in at least better circumstances than they are now.
That probably includes everyone that isn't young and starting out in life, but no matter how many it is, it doesn't change the impact of your words and life together in the slightest.

[Neville]

sometimes, when you are being serious Loz you almost make me cry .. you were being serious weren't ya pretty please .. N 😉🐧👍xx

[Lorry]

I was indeed.

[Neville]

........................... 🥲ta

[Stella Armour]

The awakening of reality is painful sometimes .... but the re-living of some moments feeds the soul and brings the warm tones back .

[Neville]

now aint that the truth ..

[Ken Simm.]

The whole feel of this romance is wonderful. It brought lumps.

[Neville]

sounds like some kind of reaction .. are you prescribed anything ..

[Ken Simm.]

Yes the love of a good woman but the chemist was closed.

[Chris Shaw]

For a short poem, I am taken by the depth of emotion your lines convey. Such a contrast between her absent warm tones and the rearranged winter shawl. I felt a little shiver. And then those worry beads, skipping one says so much. Such beautiful poetry Neville.

[Neville]

May your gods smile down upon thee as indeed you have done upon me .. many thanks our Chris .. tis good to have you back .. Neville 💜

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Neville 💜

[jacob erin-cilberto]

This is so sad...her shawl rearranged, he watches her in his dreams.
She is gone and the water is really cold in the harbor.
there are warm tones in the memory of a lost love one, but are they really strong enough to warm us?
I don't know.

[Neville]

the fact you were able to feel my words so clearly was sufficiently encouraging and more than just a heart-warming bonus after my most recent prolonged dry spell... Cheers jacob my friend.. hope you are well sir ..
N

[Chris Shaw]

A moment of awakening, when everything seems lucid. I felt a shiver. I felt loss here. I also tasted salt. You were by the sea, harbours are fascinating places. Too much time dreaming means you are not living in the present , you are living in the past. That's where you took me with these touching lines. Good to find you back here Neville.

Chris

[Neville]

.............. if these words took you there, then I shall consider it a win win .. nowt like helping a mate get out n about during lockdown, is there ...
Ta, Chris

Neville

[Chris Shaw]

You know Neville, I read these lines again, twice today slowly, and have to say I felt truly enlightened. You know it felt personal. West Bay and dancing boats or Brixham, it was well worth the outing. Definitely a win win I'd say. Touched, I was. I have an outing today....to the dentist :))

Chris

[Neville]

what a delightfully uplifting & thoughtful update.. thank you Chris .. will keep fingers crossed for the dentist and good luck

Neville

[lightsong]

This is deeply beautiful... always when it's unexpected our awaking moment comes, and always unexpectedly we are surprised by the universe, in good or "bad" way. and here at your breathtaking ending lines, I feel lost love and regret, a sudden realization that when you were supposed to do a certain thing You were doing another one, I feel being a victim of time, something out of hands. I don't know but these lines touch me real inside.

[Neville]

How very kind you are my friend .. The G Girls words and thoughts are very much appreciated .. Thank You,

Neville