Mile High

Mile High

 

Long before

the wax began

to soften even

 

And the moult

commenced

his ivory plumage shed

 

He dreamed of flying

with her

a mile above their bed

 

 

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

I thought of Icarus here Neville. He was so intent on high flying he got too close to the sun and we all know what happened to him. This poem though speaks to me of disappointment. Of something which didn't turn out quite as planned. And then I thought of airplanes. Visual with a tinge of sadness here. Nice little piece of brevity which speaks volumes about relationships.

Chris

[Neville]

I guess you could say this little whimsey reflects my very own Icarus fixation .. the second one of an intended eventual trilogy ...

I am thrilled that you could make so much out of so little

:) Neville

[Chris Shaw]

I am thrilled that you are thrilled. Now an Icarus fixation is someone whose spiritual ambition exceeds their personality limits, leading to a backlash. How do I know that? :)) I just looked it up in wiki lol. I'd like to see the complete trilogy when it's ready:)

Chris

[Neville]

I can see the day coming when all my qualifications become redundant .. all ya gonna need is a Google & Wiki .... but for the time being, I'm gonna thank ya anyway ...

:) Neville

[Chris Shaw]

Ha! I think your knowledge over my winging it Neville, will always get you the job :)) Qualifications count.

[Fay Slimm]

High-flying lovers need to be weightlessly naked to keep the bind tight - and they can do that in dreams - -- loving the undercurrent of your poetically emotive lines my friend..............x

[Neville]

Undercurrents R Us ............ nowt wrong in dreaming is there my friend ....

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Undercurrents R Us ............ nowt wrong in dreaming is there my friend ....

N x

[AJNJ]

I could feel the wax melting and the wings loosening and falling off! The dream to fly beyond things worldly came to a sad end. This is superb poetry sir!

[Neville]

how very kind of you dear AJ .. bless you my friend ..

[AJNJ]

You're most welcome, dear sir 🤗

[John the Baptist]

The lad really should have checked his emergency chute. Impact forgives nothing.

[Neville]

............ how very true, thanks :)

[barleygirl]

I've had a lifelong hankering for Icarus . . . but every time I get about a mile high, all the wax melts & my feathery constructions flutter away in the breeze. I love how your poem gives us the slightest hint of what's going on while painting fulsome vistas in our minds. I love how you bring new understanding to the ancient mythology (((SOAR))) Fondly, Margie

[Neville]

Wow ... if ya that soar Margie, I got some ointment here you can borrow .. but in the meantime, many thanks my friend (RUBS) fondly, Neville

[Lorry]

Beware Greek dudes with wings mate, they're completely mental.
But then again, mile high is certainly in my top three ways to go, behind becoming a zombie and drug fuelled sex heart attack 😀

[Neville]

two outa them three dont sound too bad at all to me mate .. my first choice would be a sudde

[Lorry]

You still there? Need an amblamance? 😀

[Neville]

Nah .. I've just been reconstituted .. almost had a near life experience mate .. that's all .. nowt to worry about 😀

[Einstein Noodle]

a wonderous dream apparently fulfilled Neville ... takes me back to my own youthful romantic dreaming .. but never did i have the poetry to fly a mile high over our bed .. short .. crisp visions and emotive in few lines .. absolutely love that closing verse ... mmmmmmmmm thanks for sharing beautiful visions sir!
E.

[Neville]

High praise indeed & much appreciated too Gene

:) N.

[R J Askew]

Love the allusions in this one. Short but just how it often is. Sigh. But the dream was good and we always come back for more!

[Neville]

A much appreciated visit my friend & truly .. always bloomin welcome too

:) Neville