Superb and profound Neville. I like the way you have staggered each thought. Works well. Yes, we are shackled to time -the great deceiver! Our common fate.
I feel winter coming on - usually it offers its own delights but we're all bit nervous.
It'll be fine!
Cheers,
Alan
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4 Years Ago
Hiya Alan wot a smashing thing to say sir ... Yes me too, I can feel a distinct chill but as.. read more
Hiya Alan wot a smashing thing to say sir ... Yes me too, I can feel a distinct chill but as you say, it does have its own uniqueness & at the end of the day, of course it will be fine .. Take care out there and stay safe too ...
Hi Neville - I love your poem, it reminds me of the regal grandeur of Ozymandias, lonely and timeless, in the desert ! x
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4 Years Ago
Bless ya Linda .... and wot an absolute bloomin compliment you just bestowed upon this old f.. read more
Bless ya Linda .... and wot an absolute bloomin compliment you just bestowed upon this old fella ... Many thank you's indeed :)
You are right Neville.
"Both the rich man
and the paupers fate …"
It is what we do in life that matters. Dead men can't enjoy life. Outstanding poetry my friend.
Coyote
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Yes, it is precisely what you have just said Coyote .. it is the deeds that makes the man an.. read more
Yes, it is precisely what you have just said Coyote .. it is the deeds that makes the man and nothing whatsoever to do with the extent of his wealth .. Stay safe,
I love your rhyme & rhythm here, but I would delete "both" from the penultimate line (picky! picky!) It is my humble opinion (in agreement with your message) that HOPE is one of those fundamental necessities for staying sane thru life. I love the line about time being preoccupied -- very clever! (((BUOY))) Fondly, Margie
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4 Years Ago
Thank you for checking and for that suggestion too Margie I shall make said amendment very s.. read more
Thank you for checking and for that suggestion too Margie I shall make said amendment very shortly (NUGS) n truly, Neville x
It is easier for a camel to pass through the blah blah etc... But havent they heard of liquidisers and syringes? Just make a person-smoothie and fire it through a needle, job done.
Although saying that, have you seen the price of people-blenders lately? Bloody shocking 😀
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4 Years Ago
Hey.. I have been tinkerin with camels n needles while I've bin away mate ... now that's kin.. read more
Hey.. I have been tinkerin with camels n needles while I've bin away mate ... now that's kinda spooky .. and .. me Moulinex went on the blink just before settin off .. now that was bloody shockin I can tell ya .... Cheers n say hi to Pingu for me wooble wib wib :)
4 Years Ago
Ha, you should debone them first. Easier on the blades. 😀
Pingu is waving at you, saying h.. read moreHa, you should debone them first. Easier on the blades. 😀
Pingu is waving at you, saying hello, although... I didn't know penguins had fingers, middle ones or not 😀
Superb and profound Neville. I like the way you have staggered each thought. Works well. Yes, we are shackled to time -the great deceiver! Our common fate.
I feel winter coming on - usually it offers its own delights but we're all bit nervous.
It'll be fine!
Cheers,
Alan
Posted 4 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
4 Years Ago
Hiya Alan wot a smashing thing to say sir ... Yes me too, I can feel a distinct chill but as.. read more
Hiya Alan wot a smashing thing to say sir ... Yes me too, I can feel a distinct chill but as you say, it does have its own uniqueness & at the end of the day, of course it will be fine .. Take care out there and stay safe too ...
... I do indeed .. and wot a bloomin good idea Rob ..
:)
4 Years Ago
i'm gonna market it... Mr. Neville's world famous hope on a rope
4 Years Ago
... I'll take a couple of cases for good measure mate .. just let me know when ya in full pr.. read more
... I'll take a couple of cases for good measure mate .. just let me know when ya in full production :)