Cold Case

Cold Case

 

It hardly seems to

Matter now she’s gone

Like nothing seems

To matter outside 

What’s right or wrong

 

They had the chance

But did not take it

She stole his heart

But then she broke it

 

Now that is

Precisely where

She went wrong

My friend don’t ya know  

 

Yes although now gone

There are minute

Traces of her everywhere

Or so it seems 

 

A hair her DNA

A poem and

An empty lipstick case

Oh and her phone of course

 

Had there been more time

He may have made her

Disappear completely

And without a single sign

 

He hopes the cops don’t rush

To get there quick and

Forget to check the

Freezer on this old cold case

 

Reviews

[Fay Slimm]

A hint of murderous deeds in this tale of evil at work ......... intent to make disappear any trace of relationship in a freeze is unique for certain -- hast yer bin watchin' Suspicious Deaths recently on T.V. dear Nev for they unpoetically shoved bodies up any cold pipe etc. - but I like a good read that gives me the creeps......... well sometimes at least - - -and in the daylight.............. Fay

[Neville]

they are at the end of the day just words....but something I guess must have inspired them... more words, I guess........ thanking you muchly Fay...

[Fay Slimm]

My pleasure is always to read your postings and sometimes for fun interpret them too - -for you have real talent my friend.

[Neville]

You got me blushing big time my friend... :)

[Reianna Jewel]

When first reading this, I thought it was a breakup that caused her to leave, then the hints of murder made me realize I was completely wrong. I loved this piece and the twist, very beautifully written

[Neville]

thank you kindly ... Neville

[barleygirl]

Your poem suggests a long, drawn-out, messy split . . . the kind I adamantly avoid! I love how your connection to "law & order" seems to symbolizes the judgment in the narrator's head more than any formal investigation outside his head! (((CLAWS))) Fondly, Margie

[Neville]

Cheers Margie thanks for the thumbs up (COPS) fondly N

[Rhayne]

Gave me chills! Lots of levels of coldness there. Think I need to read more of you.

[Neville]

thank you for checking in.. very kind of you

[Chris Shaw]

A little bit of sinister from you Neville and I know that from time to time you wander into this area. Reminds me that many cases that have gone cold from years ago are now being solved thanks to the advances in science and DNA. Quite a high price to pay for breaking a. heart I would say. A good read though methinks.

Chris

[Neville]

thank you for considering these words Chris.
Neville.

[Lorry]

Love it Nev. If I had actually killed instead of just mind killing them, I would be on my fourth season on Netflix right about now.
You got me. Up until the last two, I was thinking this was just a breakup, not the ultimate breakup.
It's given me ideas. Do you think they'll let me still post on wc from prison? 😀

[Neville]

Bless ya bro... and no worries about that, they let me so why not you as well eh'..... :)