Somewhere Behind These Eyes

a funny thing happened to me on the way to the ......

Somewhere Behind These Eyes

 

You can not punish me

With silence

My ears crave the hush

 

Neither can you hurt me

Now with poetry

For I am since blinded

 

And no longer crave or care

For words

So pray be still and quiet

 

Your moment is no more

But gone and truly lost

Such moments are but sins tho

 

At least they are in my book

And still in draft form

Somewhere behind these eyes

 

 

Author's Note

there are different kinds of darkness

Reviews

[Eilis]

This one is mysterious. I’m probably trying too hard. I can think of a few kinds of darkness, but that darkness that involves others in our minds can be the deepest. Because there are certain things that can never be resolved. When it is our own darkness we have ways and means, but darkness imposed by someone else is unpredictable.

Now I’ve talked a lot about your author’s note. But I haven’t really said anything meaningful, have I. Just taking another look. I’m grasping...but, I’m thinking of the peace one can find when there is peace with the self. The ability to become non-reactive and cease craving stimulation or interaction with the past is a moment of triumph.

I feel the poem is addressing the past which seeks to be part of the present but is not welcome. Something powerful in that rebuke. Keeping the upper hand.

I’ll stop trying to solve it and just appreciate what you’ve done with the words. Excellent bit of contemplation.

I’ll leave it to itself now.

[Neville]

Bless ya Eilis, I much appreciate the visit and then some.. Cheers and all that jazz ... Neville

[Eilis]

My pleasure, Neville. A lovely Saturday to you there.

[Neville]

.................. tis indeed a smashing day :)

[emmajoy]

For those who dream - and you always have and do, there's true beauty in silence.

[Einstein Noodle]

killer opening Vs 1&2 ... there is mystery V4 L3 ... there is a conundrum in your speaker .. moments of safety from punishment and hurt ...freed from the want and need ... yet keeps those moments in draft ..considered sin ...
i love the perspective of "..behind these eyes" ... your antagonist could be the muse ... but the poet would never consider Her musings shared a sin ... hmmmmmm could be some other human antagonist .. but the puzzle remains ... hmmmmmmmm read this more than several times Neville .. so you hooked me good! you "note" is also inspiring ... truly all kinds of "darkness" to afflict and inspire ... top o' the mahrnin' good friend!
E.

[Neville]

I love the way you work ya way through words my friend.. and particularly through my words of course... Stay well and safe out there my brother... I shall raise me glass later this Friday eve and drink to the both of ya :)

[Einstein Noodle]

and will raise mine to you and yours today! i still have a shot or two of Jamison left over from Patty's Day :))))))))))))))))))))))))))

[Neville]

20.00 hrs this very eve.. I shall raise mine to you my friend a double Jaimesons will slip down a treat... stay safe :)))))

[lightsong]

I LOVE this! dear dear Neville* clever and passionately written. and You know... It's though as You've described my state of now too, that's why I love it even more, I'm very happy I could read this today! Thank You my wonderful friend and poet✨🌟✨

[Neville]

thanking you ever so much dear friend.... stay safe and well and truly....

[light and ashes]

Hmmmm.... this is interesting.
I'm not completely sure about the meaning behind this.
I like it though.

[Neville]

That is good enough for me.. thank you..

Neville

[light and ashes]

I'm glad :) you're welcome

[Rania M]

It’s awes when anything the other does, in word or dead ceases to affect our spirit and they lose all power on us. It’s a moment of victory that you describe here and it gives me immense satisfaction reading and going back to my own such personal victories.
Hello my friend! How are you? I hope you and yours are keeping safe and well in these days of pestilence.
Much love ~ Rania

[Neville]

Hey Rania, many thanks for visiting these words, I am truly grateful to you... Just make sure you stay both safe and well and I shall return the favour... Neville

[Rania M]

We are having our share of COVID woes but not as affected as the West yet. You’re welcome my friend. Just take care of yourself and your family ❤️

[Neville]

and back at you my friend... N

[barleygirl]

This is so touching, I am deeply moved! I imagine your own situation, which I only know by bits & pieces, but also I think about when I lost my ability to walk . . . many hikes still to go within these wobbly pegs! This poem stands for all the abilities we seemingly lose as we grow older. This is for the young'uns who laugh at the thought that old people still have amorous desires. There may be snow on the rooftop (according to an old folk song) but there's still a rumbling volcano down below! (((ROAR))) Fondly, Margie

[Neville]

Hey Margie, you got me going weak at the knees so ya did... in fact, I am darn near overcome.. (SWOONS) fondly .. Neville :)

[Robert Trakofler]

he he l love the silent treatment so much i never get it:) you have many drifts in those drafts good sir you know those drafts are gonna blow out your eyes eventually so you might as well write them or wear tight goggles

[Neville]

Tight goggles it is then sir Robert... cheers BB :)

[Robert Trakofler]

easier to put the eyes back in your sockets once the wind blows:)

[Neville]

I'm meeting with my eye surgeon tomorrow at 11.15 BST... so I will let ya know squire..... Nx

[Robert Trakofler]

Oh my god I love it

[Neville]

we shall see.. maybe

[Lorry]

Sometimes we give all our attention to what we thought was important, only to find that there was something more important that we didn't pay enough attention to because of the not so important thing that wasn't, despite us thinking it was.
I need a lie down now to uncorkscrew my mind after that 😀
The mind can be a right sod sometimes, forgetting what's important at times and not letting you forget what you hoped to forget.
What was I saying?

[Neville]

I dunno, but I like the cut of your jib sir.. or do I ... of course I do maybe..... cheers :)

[Lorry]

I reckon I'll be in the mood to write some tongue twisters soonly.

[Neville]

If you could make em swoonly I wont feel quite so loonly