Thinking Backwards

a kinda reminisce

Thinking Backwards

 

If I die now

At least you will

Have read me

And that feels good

As good as when we

Showered

In the forest

With only a bucket

And sun warm rain

Between us

 

But weren’t those

The days

Laying leafy and curled

Mid canopy filtered

Solar rays

And shyness behind us

The kind of days

Poets crave and

Films are made of

 

Too golden for eyes

And just a splash of green

Both here and there

To finger and caress  

I used to smoke back then

Remember

But crave you now

More than I ever did

Those Marlboro’s

 

Funny isn’t it

I often think about

Our little echoes

And where all those

Smoke rings went

And do you ever wonder

What happened to our laughter

I know I very often do ……   

 

Author's Note

dont try this at home but let me know how it feels when the dust settles........ N

Reviews

[Lisasview]

Oh gosh Neville,
I feel that this is most definitely the very best I have read of yours so far...
Made my heart ache as I do remember those days so very well...I read deeply between and behind your lines.
I loved this Neville...
Lisa, now back to reading, reviewing and actually posting!

[Neville]

Thank you for such a heart warming & encouraging visit Lisa .. Kindest Regards, Neville about to hop into the shower before setting off to work again :)

[Lisasview]

You are always welcome, Lisa on my way to PT…

[Cherrie Palmer]

Spectacular!
It's smooth, vivid, blended emotions, that demand a trip to a day and time long past, but still saved in each heart.

Even after a night of killing off poor extras in my story I still love a well executed romance.

[Cherrie Palmer]

PS an eye catching title.

[Neville]

cor blimey.... I cant thank you enough Cherrie

N

[Fay Slimm]

A treasured scene worth thinking backwards for Nev - - you never fail to instill the need for knowing more of your intriguing stories - - so glad I caught this romantic "kinda reminisce" first class writing.

[Neville]

I am truly most appreciative of your time and consideration for my words dear Fay.. many thanks indeed.... Neville

[Fay Slimm]

My treat to read your work Nev because you and your words are worth it........... Fay

[Neville]

............ aw bless ya Fay.. thank you too N :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"but i crave you more than i ever did those Marlboros"
i crave to write lines like that.
smoke rings dissipated...relationships dissipated...
but the smell of the addiction to her...never quite did.
j.

[Neville]

You write them all the time sir... that is why I visit you so often..... Cheers jacob.

N.

[barleygirl]

This is so damn good, I can't blather with my usual nonsense becuz I'm dumbfounded. You sent me right back to actual scenes from my life that look so like this. Especially bathing in a bucket. Now I want to write a poem about bathing in an ice-cold alpine stream! You inspire me with butt-kicking writing like this! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Neville]

and I just luv it when ya talk back dirty like that.... Bless ya my luverly friend & true.... (BUTTS) fondly N

[Lorry]

That thinking backwards lark must have Spielberg and Lucy's working overtime on editing those thoughts into a greatest hits collection. It wasn't concussion that made you forget she probably smashed you over the head with the bucket, it was CGI
Ahh, it's good to be back 😀

[Neville]

Hey Bro tis good to have thee back.. Love ya like a fat kid luv's cake.. but then ya know that dont'cha... N :)

[Lorry]

Did someone say cake?
And that meant to say Lucas, not Lucy's. 😀

[Neville]

Yeah fancy a picnic....
I guessed as much ... ta :)