Thinking Backwards

a kinda reminisce

Thinking Backwards

 

If I die now

At least you will

Have read me

And that feels good

As good as when we

Showered

In the forest

With only a bucket

And sun warm rain

Between us

 

But weren’t those

The days

Laying leafy and curled

Mid canopy filtered

Solar rays

And shyness behind us

The kind of days

Poets crave and

Films are made of

 

Too golden for eyes

And just a splash of green

Both here and there

To finger and caress  

I used to smoke back then

Remember

But crave you now

More than I ever did

Those Marlboro’s

 

Funny isn’t it

I often think about

Our little echoes

And where all those

Smoke rings went

And do you ever wonder

What happened to our laughter

I know I very often do ……   

 

Author's Note

dont try this at home but let me know how it feels when the dust settles........ N

Reviews

[Lisasview]

Oh gosh Neville,
I feel that this is most definitely the very best I have read of yours so far...
Made my heart ache as I do remember those days so very well...I read deeply between and behind your lines.
I loved this Neville...
Lisa, now back to reading, reviewing and actually posting!

[Neville]

Thank you for such a heart warming & encouraging visit Lisa .. Kindest Regards, Neville about to hop into the shower before setting off to work again :)

[Lisasview]

You are always welcome, Lisa on my way to PT…

[Beccy]

Such lyrical beauty contained in this poem Neville. I read and was transported to that time and place you so enchantingly describe.

And of course, in writing this, you tell us precisely where that laughter lies; which is in a never to be forgotten memory.

Beccy.

[Neville]

I cannot thank you enough for visiting these words and for the uplifting comment you left behind Beccy … no bull but true :)

[R.E. Ray]

Neville, an exceptional account of what we might see and feel sitting along a creek or on a cabin porch, eyes closed, gray hair in the wind. I like the little snapshots and flashbacks you inserted here. Regardless of where we grew up, I think this touches many, especially writers. I has a happy-sad feeling and so sincere.

[Neville]

I dunno how I managed to miss your luverly message until just now R.E Ray.. but I am delighted and thank you muchly.....

[Patricia Wedel]

dearest Neville... I also have memories of being in a forest
and showering with a bucket of warm rain... touching and feeling
the presence of tenderness... that still remain. Beautiful poetry
etched with blue forgetmenots. truly, Pat

[Neville]

kindred spirits I reckon... and I do so love blue forgetmenots………….truly, Neville

[Anjeline]

Beautifully written. It instantly gives you a image of a far of place with peace and your loved ones....
The language used is very nice and I really liked the whole style of the write-up and the story it conveyed. Great work as always:)

[Neville]

Thank you so much Anjeline, I am truly grateful to you for visiting and considering these words... N :)

[Anjeline]

My pleasure:)

[Robert Trakofler]

Neville your laughter tickled the tree trunks and tantalized the canopy and the rings wafted to the stratosphere and sang songs of satisfied purpose to billow yet another day:) I know cause I just saw one drift past me rather pleased looking

[Neville]

Well blow me down.. I am tickled pink :)

[Einstein Noodle]

oh my goodness ...well done Nev! i was completely taken off guard ..really like what you have done with the smoking and smoke rings .. and that forest shower surrounded me with first loves and romance ... never took a shower in the forest with a bucket .. the contrast with the warm golden sun is pretty precious ... i did however ... build a backyard outdoor shower ... which was delightful and exciting ... wonderful poem sir... enjoyed reading ... would not change a thing! killer turn in closing ..so melancholy ... :(
E.

[Neville]

I am delighted you found these words Gene and am truly grateful for your ongoing encouragement and support... Cheers bro :))

[Tom]

They say first love is always the sweetest and indeed those halcyon days and serene summer nights linger long in the memory, and it’s only natural that we wonder will such harmony and perfect symmetry be within our lives once more? 💕.

Nice one Neville, just like the age old romantic bards of England, you hit all the right buttons in fine flowing, eloquently penned words!!

[Neville]

Far too kind for words so ya are.. but gotta say a mahoosive thank you Tom THANK YOU TOM :)

[gram linski]

Thinking backwards creates some wonderful, evocative emotions, well done, N, echoes of smoke rings in laughter,

[Neville]

Cheers Gram... now there's a thought & true.... N

[Chris Shaw]

Reflections of past moments, treasures in the mind. To be brought out and viewed again through older and wiser eyes. Your first two stanzas are filled with vivid and sensual imagery. I particularly liked your expression, third stanza last three lines. That really comes through. Another super write Neville. Good morning.

Chris

[Neville]

thank you Chris.

Neville

[Kesch (Finding Julia)]

Wow, this is so well written, your imagery wonderful as well. Nicely done i found this emotional really

[Neville]

you are far too kind but I sincerely appreciate you visiting and leaving behind such encouraging words ... Neville :)