Dance

Dance

 

Dance not upon

Swollen dew soaked

Meadows

But on banks of mill pools

Deep dark and still

 

Where I shall have

My way between these

Shadows

Keen and calling

Deep dark and still

 

Somewhere gasping

Laughing loving mid

Quiet forest

Cool calm and becoming

Deep dark and still

 

Then to dance a dance

Of freedom sighing

Ne’er to come

This way again

Dark deep and still

 

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

beautiful! images pop in me nog instant and i feel the serenity ..well done says i ..love the repetition ..the scene and tenour ...refreshing surprises at the mill ... and alas .. never to return to again :( ... top notch says i .. worth reading over and over .. out loud .. into me library it goes Sir Neville! thanks for sharing
E.

[Neville]

I am truly gobsmacked my friend, what a lovely start to a new day..... Cheers Gene :)

[Patricia Wedel]

Dancing deep and dark by a mill pond... never to come this way again...
The shadow in the pond... a friend who will respond... as Nightingales
sing and dream... truly a reflection of a melancholy moon. Pat

[Neville]

Bless ya our Pat.... twas that nocte for sure.... N :)

[Chris Shaw]

There is sadness in the tone of your lines, but dancing brings freedom and liberty. The sadder I am, the more I dance, and if you can't dance physically, then dance mentally. Beautiful poetry with dark and stark imagery.

Chris

[Neville]

I am a terrible dancer, and move like Bambi did on ice... thank you for checking in Chris, tis appreciated. Neville

[Papaya]

this one feels so enchanting, i love it.
hints of romance, i can easily imagine fairy lovers playing coy as they flirt through a dance

[Neville]

what a delightful thought Ana.. thank you.
Neville

[Crowley]

This is one of my very favorites of yours to date. The repetition lands a solid cadence and lends to the tone nicely. Creates a ballet like resonance mixed with nature and reflection. Amazing all the way around. Great work!

[Neville]

thank you Crowley, you are most kind and ever so much appreciated.. All Good Things to ya... Neville

[R.E. Ray]

I must admit I don’t dance often or well, but when I do I feel a sense of freedom and good spirit. Maybe I should dance more often, especially in the dark moments. Thanks for sharing this poem.

[Neville]

you and me both.... many thanks indeed for checking in, Neville

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

We need to dance when we get the chance as if nobody is watching...and if they are dance anyway- two becoming one in an enchanting melody- take a chance on a dance...🌹

[Neville]

how very true.... that's the way I always dance, not very good but always willing to try... thank you my friend for checking in.... Neville

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Pleasure always🌹

[Neville]

..... thank you

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like the repetition of that line...but the darkness here creates Poe-type shadows for the reader.
almost as if the darkness is friend...
like this one a lot.
j.

[Neville]

Poe type shadows is fine by me... many thanks jacob, much appreciated sir..... Neville

[barleygirl]

My favorite kind of dancing, your words make my heart dance! Love this & I'm ready to stomp down some meadow grass *wink! wink!* Fondly, Margie

[Neville]

what a lovely thing too say... my heart just did a little jig too... NUG ya Margie.... N :)

[AYVID N]

Indeed...to love and let go is an art. To dance there briefly, never to return again and to be free, that’s truly wisdom. Perhaps we hold on too tight and too long? This is real food for thought N.

[Neville]

Thank you DIVYA.. I think maybe you have read me well.. too long and too tight can be stifling in the wrong hands, can't it.. bless ya .. Neville

[AYVID N]

You’re welcome N :)

[Neville]

............ N is :)