Canvas

Canvas

 

I kiss your eyes

They leave warm oil taste

On my lips

.

I wonder

Will your canvas

Ever dry

?

 

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This is one of the most brilliant things you've ever written that I've read. Usually I do not like short poems becuz I WANT MORE! To me, a short poem is successful when it conjures up a vivid extended series of visions in the reader's mind (in effect, GROWING the little poem into big ideas). That's exactly what this poem does. So many avenues to ponder, after you've set up this brief painting analogy (((NUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Neville]

Blimey Margie, how flippin kind is that, or wot..Bloomin mahoosively that's wot... NUGS a plenty wingin their way back to ya N :)

[Fay Slimm]

When painted with expert care re. light and shade a canvas stays fluid for years - (think of Van Gogh and his sunflowers etc.) and a canvas oiled with love will surely remain fresh despite time's abuse........ a heart-ache hides in these six short lines methinks Nev..............

[Neville]

you could not be more write my friend, and I thank you for it.... Neville

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

This is so much lovely, Neville.
Brilliantly written.

[Neville]

thank you dear Kay.. much appreciated and truly... N

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

My pleasure... Neville.

[kentuck14]

Nev,
Pondering this poem . . . I see the receiver of the kiss as one who observes life around her, is all the time capturing it in her imagination . . . she sees more than the average person . . . perhaps someone who loves her life, and, yes, wants to share it with others. Someone who can look beyond the darkness and find beauty. Let's hope, in answer to your question, that she never loses that wonder she finds in this world. Hope this is a person who is a big part of your life. Interesting poem my friend.
Tom

[Neville]

Tom.. when these words were originally penned, the lady in question was big in the world and certainly within my life.. sadly, very sadly.. she is no longer of this world but I still feel her presence from time to time and many things bring her back to me... N

[kentuck14]

Sorry to hear that Nev . . . well you captured her memory well.
Tom

[Neville]

how very kind of you my friend.. thank you.. Neville

[Tate Morgan]

Oh that’s good I like that Neville .

[Neville]

well that's good enough for me sir.. many thanks indeed... Neville

[Chris Shaw]

So much could be said about these beautiful words. There is much imagery and many interpretations. I see this as an oil painting, an old one. I see the author kissing this painting over the years. His lips will ensure the canvas never dries I could also envisage a tear or two here. Superb brevity Neville.

Chris

[Neville]

Hey, thank you our Chris... yes, I can see how this little scribble can be viewed in several different ways... and that does please me no end coz that was my original intention.... N :)

[Chris Shaw]

It's all in the mind of the reader. Whatever you write, they will put their own interpretation on it. It maybe completely different to what you intended, it is of no relevance really.

[Neville]

Cheers and I do mean thank you... N

[Beccy]

It always starts as a blank canvas; how it ends, dry as dust, or the falling rain of tears, is in the lap of the Gods.

Short, but oh, so very sweet.

Beccy.

[Neville]

Thank you so much Beccy many thanks indeed.. Hope the pair of you guys are both well up there.. Neville :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Warm, gentle and wonderful words. No wasted words my friend. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Neville]

Cheers Coyote, much appreciated my friend... Hope you and yours are all well... N

[Coyote Poetry]

I am fine and was my pleasure to read.

[Neville]

good to hear & thanks again
N

[lightsong]

how can You do it with just few lines? I really sometimes wish to be able to write like these few effective lines and I always fail unlike You! to me this is hauntingly beautiful, sad, caring, gentle and loving... makes me even want to cry... happy tears or sad tears, makeup or without makeup, please loving Neville just always kiss them away for her...

[Neville]

How luverly my friend.. just you take care now :)

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

wow just about to turn my computer off and came across this little beauty! glad i did, thankyou

[Neville]

I am indeed blessed this fine Sunday mane... and need to thank thee before ya go... thank thou my friend.. Neville