Together Parted
A Poem by
Neville
haiku format .. other than that, you decide..
Together Parted
Perfect pink
petals parted
Strobe like light
pulsing
Then together
those waves hit
© 2019 Neville
Featured Review
Well, depending on the poet's intent or the reader's interpretation, it could be haiku or senryu (I think). I'm thinking something erotic. A "flower" blooming in the parking lot of night club, two lovers flooding each other with... "love." Damn, that reads bad. Or, maybe a funky greenhouse with strobe lights and sprinklers. You may call me an idiot without offending me, Neville. The imagery is certainly brilliant, and the structure.
Posted 5 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
5 Years Ago
Cheers my friend.. nah' reads good from here... Have a great Sunday and true.... N
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I think it's a space ship landing!!! Most of the time my understanding shows how clueless iam . Why now change that!
Posted 5 Years Ago
I think it's a space ship landing!!! Most of the time my understanding shows how clueless iam . Why now change that!
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
5 Years Ago
it can be anything you want it to be.. never change.. no not a single thing :)
5 Years Ago
Uma grande Abraço .
5 Years Ago
........... :) my pleasure & true..
This little poem, which is very pretty can be read in two ways. One is very erotic the other isn't ) Both are very nice though.
Chris
Posted 5 Years Ago
This little poem, which is very pretty can be read in two ways. One is very erotic the other isn't ) Both are very nice though.
Chris
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
5 Years Ago
I'm only gonna thank you once our Chris, so am gonna thank you for both of them (lol) :)
very different people coming together, blossoming in love...dancing as one.
Posted 5 Years Ago
very different people coming together, blossoming in love...dancing as one.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
5 Years Ago
thank you jacob, I could not have put it better myself
N.
:) I am just going to smile again and tell you that it makes me think of something nice.
Posted 5 Years Ago
:) I am just going to smile again and tell you that it makes me think of something nice.
1 of 2 people found this review constructive.
5 Years Ago
How very nice.. bless ya my friend.. that was a a thank you by the way, not wishing to pry... N x
5 Years Ago
:) you are welcome. (:
it make me think of cotton candy with sparklers, of courseread more :) you are welcome. (:
it make me think of cotton candy with sparklers, of course
5 Years Ago
how wonderful, delicious and enlightening is that :)
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Added on February 19, 2019
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Neville Gone West folks....., United Kingdom
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