Together Parted

haiku format .. other than that, you decide..

Together Parted

 

Perfect pink petals parted

Strobe like light pulsing

Then together those waves hit

 

Reviews

[R.E. Ray]

Well, depending on the poet's intent or the reader's interpretation, it could be haiku or senryu (I think). I'm thinking something erotic. A "flower" blooming in the parking lot of night club, two lovers flooding each other with... "love." Damn, that reads bad. Or, maybe a funky greenhouse with strobe lights and sprinklers. You may call me an idiot without offending me, Neville. The imagery is certainly brilliant, and the structure.

[Neville]

Cheers my friend.. nah' reads good from here... Have a great Sunday and true.... N

[Patricia Wedel]

Very sensual... as a flower feels wanted and
the other is needed.... seeded with 💕 love.
Pat

[Neville]

what a delicious thought you leave me with Pat.. Seasons Best my friend to You and all your little fledglings.... 💕x

[Patricia Wedel]

Have you read my latest poem about a Woodpecker? It is clever like you. As ever, Pat

[Neville]

how incredibly coincidental .. I just visited your woodpecker and left a little bit o me behind 💕 x

[Ken Simm.]

Roschach eroticism. What a concept. And in such a form. You should look at the paintings of Gergia O' Keefe. Or alternatively just the Little Shop of Horrors. Like it either way.

[Neville]

seeing is believing, or maybe not .. thank you for having a look... I am familiar with her work and can see where you are coming from...

[CLR9]

Dang, this is a pome about vagina.

[Neville]

it is a poem about what ever you want it to be... thank you for taking a look...

[Ted Kniffen]

Not sure what you were doing when you wrote this Nev...but I hope you weren't alone. The sensuality is overt and I suppose it could relate to two different scenarios...but I can only come up with one.

Nicely done.

[Neville]

Am smiling big here Ted.. thank you ever so bloomin much.... N

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Just when you think you ve seen it all.....miracles......

[Neville]

Eye... they do still happen.. thank you for taking a peek GWQ..... N :)

[Beccy]

I've decided; and I'm blushing. :))

Beccy.

[Neville]

me too my friend & true :))

[Crowley]

You are an expert on flowers I think!!! Lol. By the way, you’re book is amaze balls!!!

[Neville]

THank you my Friend and thank you even more for the free advertisement... N

[Lorry]

Well, I'm no rocket surgeon Neville, but i think this has more than one meaning, other than being about smelling a pretty flower, but I'll need to go ask a growed up what it means because i have such a delicate and fragile little mind 😀

[Neville]

impossible on all counts, but am gunna thank you anyway... thank you any way.... N

[An owl on the moon]

One word came to mind... which has several different meanings as well... scintillating... bright or stimulating. A perfectly pulsing parted poem.

[Neville]

what a splendid thing.. now we got options... :) cheers my friend... N