I Want To Take You Places

sometimes.. maybe ya just got to run with it...

I Want To Take You Places

 

 

I want to take you places

 

I want to teach you slowly about yourself

I want to tell you all about you

 

I want to take you places

 

Then when we get there I want to

Take you in every one of them it’s true

 

I want to take you places

 

I want to have you in monochrome and

In colour too

Beside that lonely terracotta tub

 

I want to take you places

 

But then you know that don’t you

No comment is a cop out

 

I want to take you places baby

 

What do you want me to do and where do

You really want to go

Author's Note

the original version of this would most definitely have required a mature warning... oh' well........... N

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

Your lines Neville are direct, sensual and appealing. An invitation to the needy and there must be loads of neediies out there. But of course you mentioned the original had a mature warning. All your readers will want to compare the two poems now. Your directness and your cheeky no comment is a cop out, is clever. These lines make me feel.......a myriad of different thoughts.

Chris

[Neville]

what can a direct, sensual and all round appealing hard man say to that our Chris.. tis nowt but a marketing ploy.. tho to be honest, there was a couple of xxxx's in it somewhere along the line... x

[Chris Shaw]

Methinks you've got top notch marketing skills :)

[Neville]

bless ya our Chris and true x

[Mrudula Rani]

After you have taken her to places , do teach her how to write poetry like you do ... and see her paint all the dreams you made come true, my dear poet.

[Neville]

thank you M.. I seriously thought about pointing her in your direction, so as she could learn proper.... :) N x

[Mrudula Rani]

No one writes sensual poetry, with class and good taste like you do my friend.

[Neville]

too kind and I love it... but you know that x

[kitty]

I want to go places, I realy want to you know: all those places I've never been before! These words will bring out the adventurer in any reader, drumming up exciting ideas of where or when it could be! Mixed interpretations on the - all left to the reader!

[Neville]

thank you dear kitty.. what a lovely comment you have left here... much appreciated & true... Neville

[kitty]

Forgive any 'Typos' To know new places!

[Neville]

forgiven... actually.. I thought we were going on a date.... lol :)

[kitty]

Just say the word ~ I'll be there ...tow shakes of a Swan's tail!

[kitty]

Here I go again "Two" shakes! (Lol)

[Neville]

Ha.. is it a swan or a lambs tail.. I dunno but make mine a strawberry one and a chocolate shake and I'll be there in two summinks ...

[kitty]

Dare to be different! Should actually be 'a ducks tail!'

[Neville]

should I concede defeat... nah you can have de feet, I will stick with the lambs tail and a strawberry milk shake...

[kitty]

Strawberry milkshake ...no, no, no de-feat Stop it or there'll be regret!

[Neville]

okay.. you win :)

[Lorry]

I wonder if there will be a sequel to your updated version, where comment is made and after the cutness plays and you appropriately admit all fault lay at your feet (just an educated guess, considering all the options...you are male after all), I wonder if fair maiden shall melt and allow you to taker her to all those places, or should that be in? :)
Now say after me.... I've been such a fool dear, please forgive me for everything you think is my fault :)

[Neville]

what can a geezer say.... cheers L for popping in and checking these words of mine out....always appreciated sir... now then.. please accept my apologies for the delay in getting back to ya... I have had a few things on me mind.... N :)

[Lorry]

Not at all. Hope they resolve soon.

[Neville]

cheers Lorry so do I mate :)

[barleygirl]

This poem dances around the possibilities, as if merely nudging open the reader's imagination with your repetitive entreaty, rather than trying to put words to our fantasies. I love the way this suggests a clean canvas of exploration done expertly. You tease! (((NUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Neville]

cheers BG...

[Coyote Poetry]

Great offer given in the poetry. Nice when we can show and tell another. Life is open or close doors. Most of us. Too afraid to open new one's. Thank you my friend Neville for sharing your amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

[Neville]

tis me that should be thanking you my dear Coyote.. and so I shall.. thank you brother.. N

[Coyote Poetry]

Always a pleasure to read your work and you are welcome Neville.

[Neville]

cheers my very good friend

[Lyn Anderson]

I like it as it is - but then again, I haven't the x-rated version for a comparison ...

[Neville]

curiosity killed the cat.. so I'm glad of that.... cheers Lyn... I kinda like this softer version too.. maybe.. N

[Paul Bell]

I want the original.
Okay, it's Sunday this will do for now.
If only we could put all our thoughts into action, what a time we would have.

[Neville]

damn right.. and damn true & damn it I thank you... and I mean that.. cheers

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

Silence screams- for those to hear what needs to be heard- i want never gets- but sometimes we get what we need not want- and then we are complete- 🌹

[Neville]

tis a funny old world we live in... I often find myself screaming quietly.. and rarely ask for anything.. tho never decline what might be offered freely...

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Freedom us the places if truth honest and nothing hidden- freedom isnt always free- when u truly are free then theres nothing to hide hurt or prevent whats offered freely to nit come to be- we all need to set ourselves free to truth , wherein lies much love - nothing that can hurt harm confuse it just us and then the road less travelled will take you where you meant to be and want to be no detours blockages and when arriving at destination the place you find yourself in will be oh so heavenly- beautiful words- who wouldnt want to be taken to all those places - one day well all find that place🌹

[Neville]

I certainly hope that every one will eventually find that certain utopiac destination, wherever it might be..

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

We find what we seek its in your own hands- choices of truth- the heart is a noisy chamber- listen to whst it speaks- follow the heart🌹

[Neville]

you are one wise lady methinks...