Louder Than Words

Tell me why I don't like Mondays......

 

Louder Than Words

 

Long arm

Short sword

Lots of little body bits

 Lay scattered on the floor

 

Teeth clench

On knotted cord

Getting even settling scores

Shards of broken glass lay littering the floor

 

Eyes closed

Nails bitten to the quick

Kidney punches and being sick

Emptying his magazine seemed to do the trick

 

Deed done

He turned the gun

And gently squeezed the trigger

No note or confession was ever left behind or found

 

The End

 

 

Author's Note

No one was hurt during the course of making this poem

Reviews

[Bridget McJane]

I love the tension of the poem. The intensity of wanting to read more.

[Neville]

How very kind. Many thank you's Bridget... Neville

[Amund Schofield]

I love how you created anxiet and tension

[Neville]

Thank you Amund... your visit is appreciated & always welcome... Neville

[AYVID N]

Monday seems evil sometimes. I know the feeling. I’m glad no one was hurt, Neville :)
Appreciated much!

[Neville]

Thanks friend... it never used to be my fave day but now, it dont seem so bad..... N

[john l smith]

But there was a bit of a mess left behind
perhaps things would have gone better on a tuesday

[Neville]

Maybe, but the Columbine High School massacre happened on 19th April 1999 which was a Tuesday.. both visit and thought appreciated though... cheers, Neville

[john l smith]

Much better memory than I.
I wonder on what week day some sort of tragic event did not take place?
John

[Neville]

there ain't one, take my word for it...

[angel]

Dear Lord, dear--what exactly is it that you DO?

[Neville]

I'm just a kid really, I play with words.....cheers angel N

[Verse]

Woah!!! This write gave me chills, my friend. :):) Louder on so many levels!

Mind of I borrow your title? Not sure what I’ll come up with yet, and if something comes, I promise to credit you.

Thanks, either way. :):)

V

[Neville]

Thank you for visiting and no worries, go for it.. Neville

[Chris Shaw]

Another madman bites the dust but not before he wipes out another life first and then turns the gun on himself. Gotta be in America? Why, cos guns are so easily purchased there. Hard hitting lines, disturbing scene of torture. So much hatred. Don't tell me it all happened on a Monday? I'm remembering the Boomtown rats now. I don't like Mondays either, but ......................Makes you wonder doesn't it how it ever gets to that point?

Chris

[Neville]

This sort of thing has always happened, but does seem to be occurring with increasing ferocity and frequency... thank you for taking a peek Chris.. N

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Oh, so your Monday is going about a swimmingly as mine eh Nev.? Let's head down to the local watering hole...whiskey shot...you pick!

[Neville]

Glenmorangie Signet and make mine a double.. Cheers x

[angel]

Deanston, double.

[angel]

I assume I can come along. Say no, and I'll cry.

[Neville]

you are most welcome...

[lightsong]

I actually love Mondays BUT our week stars on Sundays so I can understand why You don't like Mondays and I can understand this whole poem. of course what makes me happy that You are not hurt even a bit!

[Neville]

Thank you for visiting these words and the very kind sentiment you leave behind... N