Deceit

A good example of a faikhu.....

Deceit

 

Though initially discreet

Your indecent lust and passion

Fueled by foul deceit

 

 

Author's Note

it just came to me as she ran away from me...

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'Deceit'
Neville PAetitt,
Some things are never meant to last. This message was one of those......you penned it and simply told the truth. See and say something for it's true nature. Unfortunately a relationship which is based on lust' and fueled by deceit' will be a shallow sandy bowl unable to hold healthy waters. Good job.
Kathy

[Neville]

Hey Kathy dear friend, many thanks for visiting and considering these few words, your well reasoned thoughts are very much and truly appreciated... Neville

[θεά]

Well, if she did run away from you, you should be thanking your guardian angel for such providence. What a stark but telling senryu. Deceit is a wretched thing, can appear as corsetting in the beginning but the one duped can be really taken for a ride.

Good stuff, Neville!
Best,
M.

[Neville]

thank you my friend.. N

[sette]

so much pain in the poem very much transparent feelings

[Neville]

well there ya go.. look hard and you will see write through me...... cheers.. N

[angel]

Probably scared her off with yer headlessness...if she'd hung around, she'd have found out you're a lovely man, despite it.

[Neville]

to spite it more like.. cheers angel.. and has anyone ever told ya you are looking more like Mr. J.W.L every day......... your friend & fan Neville

[angel]

I know he was a handsome man, but as a woman....eccchh.Thanks a heap, no head.

[Verse]

Hahaha! Faikhu!!! Good one!

As to the actual deceit, her loss. Hope he has half the brain and the heart that you have. :):)

V

[Neville]

Wotch ya language now missus.. ta so much V you visiting this page is much appreciated.. Havin a larf with me is even more appreciated.... N

[Verse]

Hahaha! My mum would be so ashamed of my word choices right now... :)

My pleasure, Neville. Anytime.

V

[Neville]

I wont tell her if you dont.....

[barleygirl]

You know what happens when you lie down with pigs . . . or was that dogs? Ah yes, the filthy squandering mess of bad intentions. So nice to finally be too old for all that! *wink! wink!* fondly, Margie

[Neville]

Yuck, me too.. standing up with them tho is even more risky, coz ya can very easily trip over summat... wink nug nug.. N

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I'll be dumb enough to admit I actually googled what a faikhu is...lol. But really, does that stand for a 'fucked up haiku'? hahah jk ;P
Your content is too powerful to really notice the form you wrote this in. Someone once told me that love doesn't exist without a little bit of lust on both sides..but deceit, oh well, I think that depends on who one is fooling, the other one or themselves...
Great write, N. :)

[Neville]

You have just taken the words out of my mouth my dear friend.. that is precisely what a faikhu is.. and you are dear soul indeed to let on about checking on Google... much respect & gratitude Dr. Y............ Neville

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Ah, as a person whose main language ain't English, google is a blessing :D
A pleasure always reading you :))

[Neville]

Then I consider myself truly blessed & thank you again..... Neville

[Chris Shaw]

From the prospective of a secret lover, discreet and deceit can make good bed partners. From the one being cheeted on it sucks. This is one of the best fuckhu's I've come across. Leaves a bitter taste though don't it?

Chris

[Neville]

Well faiku Chris faikhu very much indeed.... to be honest, these words were once upon a time very relevant, but that was a very long once upon a time ago now....... Neville

[Einstein Noodle]

nice faikhu my friend :))))))))))))))))))))))) hmmmmmm discreet deceit .... just not a close pair are they .. sure to blister in the fires of passion ... nasty ouchie says i!
E.

[Neville]

blister burst a long time back.. faikhu very much tho Gene.. muchly appreciated.... Neville

[Einstein Noodle]

good on that sir! the time thing works don't it!? best of the day to ya!

[Neville]

faikhu again and reciprocated best wishes for this fair mane!.... N

[Einstein Noodle]

laughing out loud my friend ..fainks!

[Neville]

then laugh out loud quietly sir.. think of the neighbours.. tis Sunday after all.... Best.. N

[AYVID N]

This packs a punch, Neville! Lust and deceit cannot remains under wraps for long. Hell follows.

[Neville]

It caught up with me but thankfully, blew over so long ago now I can hardly remember what she tasted like..... on reflection,, I think rather bitter.... cheers for checking in..... Neville

[AYVID N]

Thankfully, the bitterness always mellows with time. I wonder about that tiny patch of numbness it leaves though?

Cheers N! Sending Sunday sunshine 🌞

[Neville]

Ah' those hidden bruises.. tell me, I got loads... sunshine appreciated & true..... Neville