Through a Tangle of Shadows

Sometimes, only sometimes mind, it is possible to see more clearly through darkness....

Through a Tangle of Shadows

 

Through a tangle of shadows

I would watch and I would wait

 

Her silence first seduced me

Then served merely to castrate

 

With tongue placed firmly in her cheek

She burnt her candles black and cream

 

With no purpose but to feign obscenities

To control, confound and confuse

 

Then before she left

She made me kneel and bow and kiss

 

The yellow tinge

Around the edges of her bruise

 

Reviews

[angel]

I was diggin it until that bruise popped up, man. Never been my scene, but I am fascinated by those who embrace such...love, I guess...

[Neville]

Don't it just take all sorts....... ta is for the love you take, which is equal to the love you make..... N

[Lyn Anderson]

Leaves some room for interpretation. For me it speaks of a conflicted love -- one in which someone was thought to be one thing, and turned out to not be -- still, the speaker felt it necessary to acknowledge her suffering, despite being cast aside. At least, that's how I see it, and I am likely wrong.:)

[Neville]

Originally written so many years ago, I would not be doing anyone any favours if I spilled the beans here and now... bless ya for dallying here a while my friend..... N

[barleygirl]

This one's a little too cryptic for me to fathom your overall message, my friend. But I love a few of your well-crafted couplets . . . "first seduced, then only served to castrate" . . . (I think I might've done that a time or two). I very much love the theme of seeing more in the dark than in the light (so true!) And that bruise at the end, very palpable, but that's what leaves me dangling in confusion (((NUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Neville]

maybe.. just maybe mind.. there is no overall message... I'm more than happy you like the bits you mention...wink wink.... N x

[barleygirl]

There are so many more of your bits that I love, still unmentioned *wink! wink!*

[Neville]

We got 2 forevers...plenty of time..Nug Nug..

[sette]

what a cruel thing to do... i can't understand people sometimes

[Neville]

Maybe it is only make believe... maybe..... Neville

[Chris Shaw]

castrate, control and confuse followed by a final command, that speaks volumes to me and then she left. I could add another c as well. This sounded cruel to me.

Chris

[Neville]

Ouch.. ouch.. and more ouch.... that will do nicely Chris.. here's another Cheers.. Neville

[Chris Shaw]

I felt some pain here luvverly Neville. Yes indeed. Have a lovely evening.

Chris

[lightsong]

very seducing and imaginative, setting the fantasy wild and free, and what's better than darkness and silence to burn it high, it was like making love with slow deep motions, then comes at the end the healing kiss of gratitude and bliss.

[Neville]

wow.. am blushing... thank you Light, now I'm lost for words... Neville

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and sometimes those who have been so hurt make every mate they encounter in future feel that same bruising...

j.

[Neville]

How very, very true and sad of course... cheers jacob... N