Shaped like a Christmas tree and then you invite your readers to place a gift of a word on it. An older poem and many of your readers have already placed words that I myself would have chosen. I will choose another. "Friendship". That is mine. When times get tough, your friends will sustain you. They will be there to help. Friends are priceless.
I like your interactive approach, it is novel, or maybe Neville.
Chris
Posted 5 Years Ago
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5 Years Ago
now you have gone and done it, using the c word like that in the middle of June.. thank you tho Chr.. read morenow you have gone and done it, using the c word like that in the middle of June.. thank you tho Chris
N.
5 Years Ago
Hmm don't normally mention it till November. I stand reprimanded :)
Very nice and kind of Cool. I really liked the usage of away in every paragraph and I think for me the blank has " our feelings" as I have noticed that nowadays people feel something else and express something else. So I really believe we should create a atmosphere where everyone can share their true feelings and understand what they really want in their lives :)
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I am more than happy to run with that.. thank you dear Anjeline :)
and in that instant
she loved him
for not what he said
but what he'd never do ...
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a distant love
remote but true
from her to him
and him to you...
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blue blushing teardrops
falling one by one
for everything he means to her
for m.. read moreblue blushing teardrops
falling one by one
for everything he means to her
for moments they've never done
in micro seconds fleeting
they flush in synchrony
each stroke
a macrocosm read morein micro seconds fleeting
they flush in synchrony
each stroke
a macrocosm
in perfect harmony
How I fill in your blank: "NOT THINKING!" (I love how the structure of your stanzas prompted many other possibilities, tho, before I landed on that). Sometimes it's better to just FEEL instead of thinking so much, (which we humans can be so very fond of doing). The rhythm of your lines feels like waves lapping up onto shore, ready to carry us away into a different realm (((NUGS))) Fondly, Margie
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I could not agree more... In general terms, I dont think we feel enough, at least men often dont..... read moreI could not agree more... In general terms, I dont think we feel enough, at least men often dont... thanks for reinforcing the belief in something that is so fundamentally important but so often disregarded...... NUGs a plenty on their way.... N:)
I think you may well have something there.. thank you Aurora
5 Years Ago
I think I was rather short with you earlier. Trust me, I don't mean any malice. Just the brusque way.. read moreI think I was rather short with you earlier. Trust me, I don't mean any malice. Just the brusque way I speak sometimes.
my dearest dearest Neville! I'm more than happy to find my way into this earlier gem from You, You've spoken everything in these superb verses that I have nothing to add or to say, and at the same time, if I opened the door of talking I may spend hours addressing and discussing every single valuable thought You've presented to us. We are all poets who write, we must respect each other, each other's style, pen, and colour. we must send great beautiful messages to the world, of Love and spreading Love... Bless You my wonderfully beautiful friend, pleased that I've stumbled in life with You ;)
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What can this old geezer say in response and send to the G Girl other than a whopping great big than.. read moreWhat can this old geezer say in response and send to the G Girl other than a whopping great big thank you on the back of a big smile :) and for what it's worth, I'm glad we have stumbled in life together... Neville
5 Years Ago
tell Mr. Geezer that he deserves it all and deserve even more :)
For me, Neville, I think the word could be "laughter".
Even serious thought requires a balance if it's not to be buried in prejudice and despair.
Your thoughts in this poem could persuade others to THINK, not wallow. Philosophy at its best.
Norman
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You my dear sir Norm are far too bloomin kind for words... but he thanks ya for it big time..... Nev.. read moreYou my dear sir Norm are far too bloomin kind for words... but he thanks ya for it big time..... Neville
Neville I would say that you've found a way with words...but if it is away with words then I would have none to contribute to your poem.
There are many to consider... 'uncommon sense' works for me.
A good write, Neville.
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uncommon sense does it for me every time.... Bless ya Ted a much appreciated visit sir..... Neville
Shaped like a Christmas tree and then you invite your readers to place a gift of a word on it. An older poem and many of your readers have already placed words that I myself would have chosen. I will choose another. "Friendship". That is mine. When times get tough, your friends will sustain you. They will be there to help. Friends are priceless.
I like your interactive approach, it is novel, or maybe Neville.
Chris
Posted 5 Years Ago
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5 Years Ago
now you have gone and done it, using the c word like that in the middle of June.. thank you tho Chr.. read morenow you have gone and done it, using the c word like that in the middle of June.. thank you tho Chris
N.
5 Years Ago
Hmm don't normally mention it till November. I stand reprimanded :)
k okay, you've offered an alternative to discussion of [poetic] topics. Let's talk about "sadness" shall we? That's my word filling in the blank. mine. Those who do not acknowledge the sadness curl in the corner of startling awareness and wonder ..... what? me??
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6 Years Ago
Your contribution has been acknowledged j and is considered appropriate. Thank you for taking part.... read moreYour contribution has been acknowledged j and is considered appropriate. Thank you for taking part.....Neville
This IS something different. Interactive poems. You could set a trend here. My word for the empty space is REAL LIFE. In other words , action, not words! Nicely done.
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Many thanks indeed Great Aunt Astri, much appreciated & for what it may be worth, there are a couple.. read moreMany thanks indeed Great Aunt Astri, much appreciated & for what it may be worth, there are a couple of other 'interactive' scribbles among my several pages here. All Good Things, Neville