Birds on the Wire

Birds on the Wire

 

Beneath

Their collective weight the thin wire bowed and in the breeze

It gently swayed both to and fro

 

Then

Without any overt sign at all they grasped the cable in their claws and rose into the air

 

Climbing higher

  until that cable arched and simultaneously they let go

Delighting in the song it sang

Then they were gone 

without a trace

Without 

a single feather out of place

Like they had never been there after all

.

 

Reviews

[lightsong]

maybe we should learn from birds that even the smallest neglected things hold amusement, if we were ever want.

few moments of joy what You've shared my friend, thank You for the care sharing Your moments with us.

[Neville]

thank you for the visit my friend, you are always more than welcome..... N

[Chris Shaw]

Your title drew me in straight away Neville. We must be on the same wave length at times, I have an identical title, but a different subject matter, but it did involve looking at birds on a wire. This is truly beautiful and so visual. Nothing like birds in flight, soaring in the thermals to lift your spirits, and you have done that with your wonderful lines. Hope you are having a great holiday, we are just about to go boating. xx

[Neville]

Thank you Chris, a much appreciated visit, as always... Holiday is great too ta... Enjoy the water and be safe...

[Silmara McGarry]

I really enjoy it reading! I love this part: Then they were gone
without a trace Without a single feather out of place...Superb! :-) Best regards. Sil

[Neville]

Bless ya Sil, your words really mean a lot to me..........All Good things, N

[Cherrie Palmer]

I do, like green eggs, Sam I am! Very witty loved it Would make a great kids picture book .

[Neville]

Thank you for your consideration of these words, much appreciated.......

[Cherrie Palmer]

:) it was a great piece, I enjoyed it.

[Mary_Spillane]

It resonates a "twaaaannnnggggg" like a fiddler testing a violin string, nature's musicians at their best. :) Thanks for sharing x

[Neville]

Very much appreciated Mary, many thanks, N

[Terpsichore]

I hear the sound of unloosed chains, of freedom and new horizons.

Excellent poem which I very much enjoyed.

T

[Neville]

I am, as always grateful for your consideration and comment, bless ya T.....N

[Lydia Shutter]

What a lovely scene you paint here, Neville....and a good example of team work too! There is something magical about the last line. Beauty....it is fleeting, isn't it? Very good write. Lydi**

[Neville]

Thank you again dear Lydi.....N

[Lyn Anderson]

I love it. Very visual. One tiny thing, I might say AT all -- but then again, I am terrible at counting syllables etc.

[Neville]

You may be write but I am gonna leave it until I have had more time to consider. I am having problems with this PC as everything is in the cyrillic alphabet.....Dobra den & thanks for the visit x

[Lyn Anderson]

my pleasure

[V]

Nice, descriptive piece of poetry. I like your choice of words and how you structured it.

[Neville]

Hey, many thank you's are heading your way. Much appreciated...All Good things, N

[V]

You're welcome.

[Circe]

I love the detail in the observation... this really delights in their playful, clever nature... the freedom of coming and going as they please. I feel like I am in this moment you describe watching those birds! Thank you!