Oriental Woman

This really happened a long time ago when trains ran on time... I still remember how she smelt of citrus fruit and jasmine tea....

ORIENTAL WOMAN

Oriental woman

Small and frail

Come and sit beside me

Your hair

Like a ravens back

Shining long and black

How nervous you appear

Tapping

Lightly on the floor

To a tune I can not hear

Unable

To hide a smile

I hoped that we might talk

A while

Wanting to see

Those perfect teeth

Set behind two perfect lips

However

My train is early

And I must make my way

Toward the door

 

Author's Note

Tear it apart, go on.... I dare ya

Reviews

[Joshua W. Harris]

No reason to tear it apart in the slightest. At least I don't think so. Perhaps others will have other things to say about it, but not I.
These sort of chance encounters with strangers that we are drawn to without any real reason behind it happen quite frequently, and you have portrayed it quite well, in my opinion. I liked the piece very much. =]

[Neville]

Your time and opinion are much appreciated. Many thanks, Neville

[J.P. Bristow]

Okay hate the title you could have done better.....perhaps invoke more Bowie....but the content was good.

[Neville]

I am honored that you are taking so much time to consider some of my stuff... I will reciprocate very, very soon... All Good Things, N

[A. Amos]

This was entertaining piece of work...great job!

[Neville]

Thank you my literary friend... N

[Lyn Anderson]

I shant tear it apart. It has this lovely longing feel, despite the now politically incorrect descriptor in the title. Ahh, thank God for poetry and political correctness be damned. Now, one thing -- toward the door, I believe -- yeah, I know, the grammar police -- sorry!

[Neville]

Hey, the 'grammar police' got me again. Fine imposed and consider myself well and truly corrected. I'm gonna getcha one day, just mark my words... Thanks again, N

[Einstein Noodle]

"tear it apart" ??? i love this very real moment of grace and beauty, hope and disappointment .. she remains a woman of your dreams i am sure ... as i read the scene was painted .. i might have been one of the people you passed as you went to the door ..
E.

[Neville]

Hey E.N my good friend, you are far too kind, but I like it of course I do Oh' and now you mention it, if you were on the 09.15 fast train to London Euston on 5th July 1976 maybe we did pass each other. I was the guy with long hair, patched jeans and a pen in my hand... All Good Things, N