Observation Through Dark Glasses

Make mine a pint

Observation Through Dark Glasses

Two large birds

As black as death

Perched one each side of me

Smoothing out their feathers

Until they fitted perfectly

 

Ain’t it dead in here the first one said

Yeah it’s kinda great the other one replied

With that they each ordered another round of drinks

And hovered around the bar till closing time

 

Author's Note

Take it apart

Reviews

[Crowley]

Exactly where I like to be, between two birds at the bar, regardless of time or age, I will be their best fiend by the time they leave...as I am sure you would be as well. Great one my friend!

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Maybe I'm the one sittin' tween two birds! LOL

[Crowley]

We will be preening and smoothing our feathers....but yes to the shots please!!!

[Neville]

What a pair, bless you both.. bottoms up... N

[Riddhi]

I loved this poem...I loved the way you arranged your ideas in multilayered form...Everytime you read you will get a different interpretation of this poem..I especially liked the title..It perfectly fitted the poem..Overall , great work...
Keep on writing and thanks for sharing..
Riddhi

[Neville]

Then I thank you again Riddhi and thanks for the tip too.. maybe if everyone reads these words over and over, they might think I have written more than I actually have.... Neville

[Riddhi]

Hmm...This piece was indeed great...

[Riddhi]

Hmm...This piece was indeed great...

[Neville]

You are far to kind, but I like it... N

[Wild Rose]

With you while smoothing their feathers and in the bar

The bar our birds go to is open till roosting time and opens with the morning sun

[Neville]

sounds delightful.. thank you Wild Rose, make mine a double would ya, cheers... Neville

[Wild Rose]

Double yes >> Fat off yesterdays meat . some stale bread crusts crumbs from the biscuit box and last nights cake and cold water in the bird bath > Your welcome > the birds love it

[Neville]

Cheers.... :)

[Ken Simm.]

Ah surrealism and humour I love that. Layer upon layer, I love that as well. Predatory birds in both ways. Love that. In fact I cannot find anything not to love here so I am sorry I cannot take it apart.

[Neville]

Thank you Ken, I am well & truly honoured..... Neville

[silentwriter180]

lol, love that. Actually reminded me of when a crow actually stepped into one of our local bars. It wasn't too busy at the time, so no one really noticed it until a woman opposite the end of the bar screamed. The bird then flew up and got lost on how to get out. The bartender grabbed a broom and we all went to one side of the bar, and basically "shoved" it outside the door. Quite the event!! lol

[Neville]

sounds like an entertaining evening was had by all... thank you for visiting and leaving a little of you here.... N

[Chris Shaw]

Squashed at the bar between two women eh? I guess if you were wearing dark glasses everything would have appeared black. I have to confess when I read this first time I saw two crows, but on second reading realised that I wasn't in the natural environment and that you had taken us inside a bar. Clever, how you do that with your words. The conversation between the two birds is funny. Was one of them deaf? Good evening Neville.

Chris

[Neville]

Good evening Chris.. Cheers...now what makes you think they were not crows after all, and no neither were deaf...

[Chris Shaw]

That's what I love about your lines, they are so multi layered. Read your poems four times and you get four different interpretations. The crows came into mind too quickly. I thought, no can't be crows, he must be thinking about summat else :))

[Neville]

.......... smiling.. :) Morning Chris

[Lyn Anderson]

Ah, Neville, so subtle, so clever. This one speaks volumes without saying much at all. To all the sad and dark and only meeting and commiserating.:)

[Neville]

Cheers Lyn...Is this a record for delayed responses ? Aw come on, four years aint that bad, is it..... Neville

[Lyn Anderson]

Wow. 4 years. Crazy.

[Neville]

Yeah, just found y and wanted to say thank you, so thank you... N

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Hey who are those old birds at the bar with Nev, Lyn? Wanna shot with me and Nev.?

P.s. & Nev, I might have you beat on that timeline response thingy!LOL

[Neville]

tis our secret... yes please.. well done you.. ta..