The Insult

Tell me what you see & then look again...

THE INSULT

You little maggot

How you cling to apples

Hardly able to grasp hold

Only to leave them rotting

Your fragile love

Will never last

Your light will fade

And I swear one day

Your body too will resemble

The bloody remains

Of the cider makers press

 

Author's Note

I have not touched a drop for several years

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

i saw the title and that you posted it and the hook was irresistible my friend :))))) hmmmm i see the maggot and the apple ... i relate it to a rotten relationship ... based on something shallow ...perhaps sex .. and misinterpreted for a Golden Delicious .. it feels like angst .. now to look again sir.
so ... the damnable maggot certainly faces an uncertain future as a fly ... pesky .. not well received by humans with a swatter ;) ...i read your note .. can i assume you are talking about cider? ..not sure how it connects ... going to read others comments and see if enlightenment can strike me .. loved reading .. i like the game of reading again ...
E.

[Neville]

correct sir.. or at least it was when these words were first posted .. I have since fallen off the waggon and occasionally imbibe of a pint of the ruff stuff .. our local cider.... keep checkin back Gene.. I shall tip you a wink if ya get it.... N :)

[Einstein Noodle]

well ... perhaps the worm never made its exit .. adding a bit of protein to the press ... enjoy the cider sir ;)))))))))))))))))))

[Neville]

Setting off for the old mill right now....

[Fay Slimm]

The predatory act of eating away at the sweet juice found in another is an excellent metaphor for "fragile love" which takes and hardly ever gives - -- a masquerade indeed of the real and you expose its shallowness as an insult with dire repercussions here Nev. ........ well that's I see it on first reading.

[Neville]

Go to the top of the class & write out 500 times I must not be so astute coz it aint fair on all them who aint so stute… :)

[Fay Slimm]

Ha ha - gerroff wid yer - - twas not that hard....... big smiles here tho' as I begin the 500........... x

[Lorry]

Nicely done Sir, but I admit having to peruse farther down, to Sir Noodle of Einsteinia's review to get the answer.
Up until thenI was thinking that you perhaps like me, found half of one in the bit of the apple you hadn't just swallowed, and are still in therapy to this day because of it.
I stick to bananas now, they come with their own jacket 😀

[Neville]

I am still in therapy... call me bananas, but come to think of it, I'm still in my own straight jacket too... cheers squire..

Neville

[Norman 223]

It's wonderful what a pint of scrumpy can do to the imagination. How many did you have before writing this, Neville?. Of course, the additional maggot protein was the extra spur.
Loved it. 🤪

Norm.

[Neville]

Absolutely Sir Norm, you got it in one... I have never been able to manage more than three pints of our local extra dry and hold a sensible conversation.. Glad to have you back my friend and I trust you are a much improved version these days... Much love.

Neville

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

This is beautifully crafted, Neville.
The topic and its underlying meaning wrote to me a message about the effect of insult.

[Neville]

You are far too kind my friend... and always appreciated...

Neville

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

It's my pleasure, Neville.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

A parasite I think- either larvae, woman predator, or both. Riddle me this: does the apple rob the tree of nutrients as the maggot robs the apple of nutrients? Is it a vicious cycle? Your poem is food for thought Neville, and I loudly laud the wit it fed from. Missed reading you. Kudos my friend!

[Neville]

Oh' and I have missed thee too my Lady Annette, but and it is a BIG BUT you are always welcome and truly....

Neville :)

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Warmly given, warmly taken. Glad we’re both back!:))

[Neville]

sentiment reciprocated :)

[Chris Shaw]

Telling it like it is:) The last three lines had extra venom in them. Pulp I thought. Yes, she's gonna end up as pulp. Relationships. Then I read it again and I thought this is about cider. Maybe a relationship with what your part of the world is well renowned for. A nice glass of. Then I read it again and I checked the date it was written :))

Chris

[Neville]

and.....
don't ya just love it when a plan comes together..

Cheers,
read moreand.....
don't ya just love it when a plan comes together..

Cheers,

Neville

[light and ashes]

I think that perhaps the way that I read this is different than how you meant it to be perceived. I read this as being about a toxic relationship as well. It is well written though maybe a bit harsh but effective.

[Neville]

a gentleman never tells.. or so they say.. I like your take tho.. honest

Neville

[light and ashes]

You're welcome

[Drake]

Insults be boomerangs, one hits and it hits back on him. Valid rant you've expressed. Whoever did wrong to you, wait till the boomerang hits him or her back and you don't have to do a single thing.
I like it when someone wears off his anger through poetry.
Keep writing!

[Neville]

thank you, I shall surely try

Neville

[barleygirl]

Many things I love, but first -- your fine art of telling someone off, ensconced in gentle kind observations, not a constant stream of screeching (like I do). The apples/cider press metaphor is vivid & telling -- leading to your well-crafted ending that can be taken any number of ways (life's detritus? face's wrinkles? a shrew's venom? -- all sorts of "remains" possible!) Another one of yours that pops off the page (((CRUSH))) Fondly, Margie

[Neville]

Bless you Margie... Sometimes, it is the only way I can get summat off me chest (B***s) fondly Neville

[andrew mitchell]

Couldn’t help think it was about trolls. One thing is for sure no apple pie for you. Expressively written in fine style Nev on a third reading no apple cider for you either!

[Neville]

Cheers Andrew... Although originally written before trolls became an issue.. I like your take on these words, probably more than the original inspiration behind them, which I have since forgot.... so hey, thanks for giving them a purpose... Hope you and yours are all well sir.... N

[andrew mitchell]

We are all well, thank you Neville, and to you and yours.
The only thing that hasn't improved is my poetry but it passes the time and its like fishing someone will take the bait.

[Neville]

Good to hear Andrew.. you got a lot of us hooked.. N

[andrew mitchell]

thanks Neville

[andrew mitchell]

And that's no insult!

[Neville]

……….. N :)