Some Are Left Behind

Another one I made earlier.... much earlier

Some Are Left Behind

 

You said you would but never did

You said you had and that you were extremely proud of it

 

You with your smile as beautiful as the sun

All this means nothing to you does it

 

You who were as welcome as the rain is to desert flowers

Yes you with the hair and that feral look

 

Your pained and weary eyes gazed upon by many

Was it you who won the battle was it you who lost the war

 

It now seems that many died on both sides

Yet some were left to wonder whilst others left deformed

 

 

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

Often a pretty smile is just a facade for an evil soul. Unfortunately, being taken in and duped by that pretty smile is all too easy. Great metaphor in this one. People do not realize when they have won "the war"...and continue to fight till they actually lose everything. There is honest emotion in this one...the pain of heartbreak is palpable. Lydi**

[Neville]

Hey, it is you who are too kind Lydi & that's for sure... N

[Lydia Shutter]

nope, just calling them as I see em!

[Cherrie Palmer]

The eyes told us what the smile did not. Beware a wild and reckless heart.

[Neville]

you just made this hard man cry...

[Paul Bell]

Jesus is on your side.
The devil rides by.
The war is over.
But for some, it lasts forever.

[Neville]

indefinitely my friend.. and that's a long, long time..:)

[emmajoy]

Smiles, beauty and the like are, supposedly, the opposite to frowns, ugliness and maybe, a touch of hypocrisy. How people look is immaterial, it's how they are, how they behave and even more - respect other people's feelings and ways of being. Perhaps. Most people wear 'adopted' cloaks, many for good reason.. as your fine poem suggests, others make use of it when it suits their purpose. Perhaps. There are thoughts in this poem that go far deeper than the words suggest. Perhaps.

[Neville]

Goodness me.. I was not expecting that..How very true emmajoy, nowt so strange, or cruel as folk can be... nor odd, nor kind, nor quirky.. perhaps.. N

[emmajoy]

I'm sorry, perhaps i misunderstood the thoughts behind your writing which is, as ever, worthy as worthy is. I'm more than willing to re.think.

[Neville]

nowt to be or feel sorry about at all.. how could there be :)

[Chris Shaw]

The behaviour of some can leave others feeling crippled. That's what I am picking up here. A beautiful smile and bad behaviour? That spells ugly to me. What interesting lines you give us Neville. So much to think about. So much to ponder on. "You said you had and were extremely proud of it". I know that line. That was bad behaviour too

Chris

[Neville]

Aah our Chris, you would make a great detective ya know.. well of course ya know.. ya found this bad boy out.... morning and a good un I hope... N

[Chris Shaw]

It is a Good morning Neville. We had a celebration for Beth's 18 th at home last evening and we have a new kitten! Out tonight for another celebration for her. Detective? I am, I can and I will. One day I will tell you about my best detective work ever lol. Bad boy!

[Neville]

Good to hear Chris.. enjoy all the celebrations.. am glad you got a kitten... you are, you can and you will for sure... look forward to that.. Bad Boy say's tarrah for now..

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

I knew a man like this once. He looked awesome with his cascading tresses and his lovely, great, big eyes! He was arrogant and always at war. If there was no one around he fought himself and even the air around him sometimes! Till one day he lost it all and how sadly and badly he lost it! If there is anyone to be pitied now, it’s him. All because he didn’t know when to stop fighting!

Your words evoke such thoughts in me always, dear N!

Love,
KittyKat

[Neville]

I am so glad you shared so much with me here..I truly appreciate your time, thoughts and opinions... Yes, I have met several people, not always men who fall very much into this mould....N

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

They are all kinds of sad, broken people in the world, N. Can’t help them all. Bless ‘em and move on is what I do. 😦

[Neville]

a good strat that cat..

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Yes. Forgetting is very healing.

[Neville]

must try and remember..

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

😺 ...... :)

[Neville]

how do you do that..

[Lyn Anderson]

A melancholy piece for sure. Lost love, strained love? It seems distant, but close.

[Neville]

You got it then. Cheers, N