A Turning Point

Not sure how to describe this really but would certainly appreciate any printable suggestions. Starter for one though, = Based entirely on a vivid imagination. Sorry to disappoint...... N

A Turning Point

Sunlight shone between the bars

As the rusted and obsolete lock slowly turned

…

Outside a fierce wind drove rain into my eyes

A stranger passes by

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For the first time in two years

I catch the scent of oranges & remember sticky fingers

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Then standing at a crossroad

With my conscience running wild

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Moments later  

Another stranger passes by

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Forgive me if I stare at you

I am free again

…

Author's Note

Imagination eh!

Reviews

[Fay Slimm]

Brilliant write Nev. - The feeling of freedom after so long locked away in what appears a dungeon is so clearly brought out in this verse of imagined pleasures and what strikes a person first and foremost - -- sights and smells must mean a lot and am loving the thought that contact with humans albeit strangers is clearly very important to one stressed by isolation. First rate poeming from my tender-hearted friend.

[Neville]

thanking you is always so very easy Fay .. and I owe you so very many of them ..

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thanking you is always so very easy Fay .. and I owe you so very many of them ..

Neville

[Fay Slimm]

My love of poetry began by such pleasures as reading skilled lines that flow with intrigue - - and yours my fine Scribe comes easily tops with me .

[Neville]

.. I am both humbled and blushing my lady Fay ...

[Robert Trakofler]

I think you were channeling a past life or a past life was channeling you sometimes it's the bars in our brains other times it's the bars in our passage the restrict our motions but i find generally in both cases its never the bars that bar our hearts

[Neville]

I was gonna say bar humbug, but then I noticed there were so many bars, it might make me sound a bit sheepish ... All Good Things

Neville

[Robert Trakofler]

don't be em-bar-essed:?

[Neville]

.. ewe are such a cleva Bunny Rob .. but there is always more than one side to every story .. love the em-pathy tho' bro ..

[Meenakshi Dutta]

Title is so catchy.
And the work, I somehow catch the vibe of a person, who is into that particular moment only. Rejoicing! His mind free free like a bird in the sky.
Nice read.
Best wishes.

[Neville]

I am delighted you chose to stop & consider this oldie, rather than a more recent scribble .. many thanks my friend ..

Neville :)

[lightsong]

it's either You look to the past and drown back to be stuck, or move ahead and have your chances, and You chose (or your imagination did :) ) to move on... nothing better my friend, nothing better... what's yours can't pass You, so even if there is something that's for You from the past, it will find a way to return as You keep your head up and move on.

[Neville]

You really do have such a wise & kind head on your young shoulders ... I aim to heed your advice .. however, to be honest, these words were first writ many years before the Café even opened its doors and I am not sure what my original inspiration was ... Stay safe and well my very dear literary friend and poet ...

Neville :)

[lightsong]

I did notice dear N that it's an old poem (maybe not as old as You've just informed me ) and I do know not everything we write is about ourselves so I was speaking to the character of your poem even when it was addressed with "You" :)

[Neville]

the character in the poem just asked me to say hi and thank you for saving him from obscurity :)

[lightsong]

Hi there Mr. Character 👋

[Neville]

He say's catch ya later :)

[Silmara McGarry]

First of all what catch my attention was the title, than as I read the poem, I thought how perfect the title was...
I really loved your poem, it is like a story, or a movie at the start. And though I am happy that he is free, I thought: now what? lol....Maybe you can move on from there?! Is just an idea...lol
Stay safe
Sil
:-)))

[Neville]

How very kind of you Sil .. Much appreciated my friend :)

[Silmara McGarry]

You are most welcome my friend :-)

[Tom]

You should introduce these imaginative lines to the beginning of an exciting adventure story/poem ?

[Neville]

Oh do check out 'A Certain Point of Beauty' when it has been considerably edited. The would be psychological thriller I mean, not the poem by the same name unless, & I do mean unless, you are so inclined. All Good Things, N

[Tom]

I will indeed Neville!

[Ruth]

I really like this...the sensation of feeling free again, the aromas, the tangible nostalgia, beautifully done x

[Neville]

Goodness me. We must have been viewing each others work simultaneously. Bless ya PRS too kind in my book though. All Good Things, N

[Ruth]

And to you hon...most welcome!