In The Beginning

Hey ho said Roley

In The Beginning

 

In the beginning

When everything was fine

When you were just another body

And I was but a liar

 

I must admit I much prefer

The mutual innocence we shared

On cathedral afternoons beside the river

Tho punished by your absence now

 

I must confess I never

Realised my hand was

Quite that close to your undress

Did I frighten you away

 

 

  

Author's Note

Any comment appreciated

Reviews

[Justine]

So many factors come into play with every interaction, some of which are unseen and unknown. I took this at more than face value, being about having a "casual" relationship but the "liar" meaning there were feelings that were bursting to break free from restraint. Kind of follows on from another of yours I once read maybe, but perhaps I read into things way too much. I like your style, great flow and a nice realism in the word choice. Justine

[Neville]

Thank you Justine your encouraging comments are always greatly appreciated, Neville

[Neon]

A true man always accept his lies and faults for true Woman. Love poem.

[Neville]

Cheers Neon, most chuffed by your kind sentiments, All Good Things, Neville

[Lyn Anderson]

I like this. Assuming a young man befriended a woman and made a move too quickly and turned her off. As for the style, the rhythm, the structure etc., very good.

[Neville]

A lot of my stuff is imagined rather than from personal experience which for some reason disappoints some whilst serving to excite others. Strange innit? AGT's N

[Tom]

Me thinks you moved to quick sir ?

A wholesome, holistic introduction to courtship, a learning curve indeed my friend!

[Neville]

Why thank you Tom, t'was but a literary learning curve, but a learning curve nevertheless ... All Good Things, N