When You Were Perfect

Just a poem & a chunk of me...

When You Were Perfect

You were by no means

The beginning

And now

There is no use pretending

That you might have been

The end

 

Never the less I loved your

False innocence

Those orphan clothes

Our differences

The way we were

When we were on our own

 

But like so many dreams

Ours faded

And now that it’s all over

Don’t hate me or the memories

We made but think of me with

Fond regard if you think of me at all

 

For nothing can

Now tarnish

My memory of you

As you were

When we were lovers

For then you were indeed perfect

Author's Note

When she was perfect, she was perfect. Taken away far too early & at that certain point of beauty I keep alluding to, or banging on about... N

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A wonderful poem shared Neville.
"For nothing can
Now tarnish
My memory of you
As you were
When we were lovers
For then you were indeed perfect"
I loved the above lines. Kind memories, we do keep. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Neville]

You are far too kind Coyote .. but always and I do mean always appreciated and welcome to visit my words sir ... N

[Coyote Poetry]

Hello Neville and you are welcome.

[Neville]

..................................... cheers Coyote :)

[light and ashes]

bittersweet romance..... well written.

[Emily B]

And now her perfection will live as long as these words do.

Lovely to read.

[Neville]

.... How very kind and much appreciated .. Thank you so much Emily B ..........

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.... How very kind and much appreciated .. Thank you so much Emily B ..........

Neville

[Robert Trakofler]

what a treasure of your visions recollection! This is a gift of resplendence now shared for us all to feel in these lines... may you never lose this sight, my friend I have but a handful of these memories and cherish them I always will brother poet

[Neville]

Coming from the Bunny, I am more than honoured .. bless ya Rob .. stay safe n true :)

[Kelly Scheppers]

Writing this surely must have been a great catharsis for you. Such a warm memory, Neville. May it always comfort you, no matter how long the years!

[Neville]

You might well have something there Kelly.....your visit and understanding are much and very truly appreciated....... Neville

[Kelly Scheppers]

I've been trying to get some reading in, so it was good seeing you! Are you experiencing any problems navigating the site, or is it just me?

[Neville]

No, not just you.. it is absolutely awful.... slow and unresponsive... bit like me really.....am tempted to shut down but it has been like it for days.....N

[Kelly Scheppers]

...that's actually a relief to know. Thanks, Neville. I messaged Charlie earlier this evening about it...hopefully it won't be much longer. Take care and hang in there, ok?

[Neville]

Cheers Kelly.....will do... who is Charlie? ...

[Kelly Scheppers]

He's the moderator here at the WC.

[Neville]

Ah' thanks Kelly.......

[Kelly Scheppers]

When you've been around this place for ten years, you have a habit of picking up things, ya know?

[Neville]

Indubitably & thanks again...... N

[Kelly Scheppers]

...my pleasure! ; )

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Lovers are always perfect in they love. when our loved one leave us . there is now empty space we miss that pefection and this wecomingg heart . its very honest write with nice hint of missingg one perfect person. i hope there willbe someone for you waitingg very soon. all thge best and take care my friend.

[Neville]

What lovely thoughts and words you have left for me to find here Marin, and they are so much appreciated, cheers... Neville

[Papaya]

Written with a wonderful tenderness and fond reflection.
I thought this was lovely Neville. Bang on to your heart's content.

[Neville]

Bless you Ana and thank you ever so much for stopping for a few moments and considering these words, tis truly appreciated.... Neville

[Papaya]

You're welcome Neville. It was my pleasure.

[Chris Shaw]

When You Were Perfect, that is an exceptionally high summit to achieve. Most of us have faults and so do our dearest loved ones, but we accept them because they are so loved. To achieve perfection, that's something else. But then this is about a tragedy, and I think in those circumstances, when someone is taken from us at a tender age, we elevate them to the greatest height, and I think anyone would do that. This is tenderly written, makes you wonder what might have been. You have written a sad poem Neville, a very sad little poem.

[Neville]

I agree, perfection is indeed almost, if not always beyond reach....but then there are always those very few and rare exceptions... Thank you so much Christine for taking time to consider these words of mine.... Neville

[Chris Shaw]

You are more than welcome Neville.

[Chris Shaw]

Another read, over two years down the line. Well worth the visit I might add. Subsequent reads always add more value I find. Perfection, ah what an intriguing meaning that has, for almost certainly perfection is different fot each and every one of us. You appear to be on a nostalgia trip with the reposting of this gem. Hope it isn't too painful for you.

Chris

[Neville]

thank you Chris, a much appreciated re-visit and true ..

Neville

[Justine]

I can really relate to this. It made me think of how we tend to see what we want to see when "love" hits. You have written the whole process perfectly of the life cycle of a relationship. Memories are part of that cycle and they, too, are subject to change as time progresses. I think to regard someone positively is the best way to go to prevent the angst and bitterness that may follow for some. I enjoyed this poem. Justine

[Neville]

Your comments are truly very much appreciated Justine.
All Good Things,
Neville