All Your Lovers Are Losers

This is an old one so be gentle

ALL YOUR LOVERS ARE LOSERS

All your lovers

Like strangers in clinic rooms

Wait by your door

And each has a key

With your name

And their number scratched on

 

You ask them for nothing

Knowing they would give you the sky

To each you are perfect

A woman indecently fine

 

Your lovers like heroes

Are patiently waiting for you

With beards and lined faces

In all the right places

Your lovers are losers like you

 

 

 

Author's Note

If your gonna run these words through your head try doing it to the tune of L. Cohen's 'Sisters of Mercy' If your gonna try singing them, use the same method but do it out loud. Not next to a stranger on a bus though....

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

"Your lovers are losers like you" - scathing final line Neville. Sharps are out. Yes these lyrics to Cohen's "Sisters of Mercy", work very well. Can imagine him singing it with his slow drawl voice. Who's a clever boy then? And even some rhyme thrown in for added measure.

Chris

[Neville]

All written many, many moons ago now Chris, in a moment of bitterness maybe... her name was... ....and I did love her briefly.... ta so much.. N

[Chris Shaw]

Of course you loved her, otherwise there would have been no need for the sharps. All part of life's rich tapestry :)

[Neville]

I aint half sharp me...

[Chris Shaw]

Not quite as sharp nowadays me thinks.Time mellows

[Neville]

I thought that's what cats did...

[Chris Shaw]

Ha ha, they do indeed

[Neville]

............see, I'm nearly purrfect..

[Chris Shaw]

Love playing with words don't you? You still keep me on my toes though. Sometimes I have to look twice.

[Neville]

always best to check

[light and ashes]

I laughed at the end of this. Yes, this person is a bit of a s**t..
Well pinned.

[Neville]

Pon my soul, my fancy has just been tickled.. Thank you for considering these old words my friend...

Neville

[light and ashes]

You're welcome :) lol

[Lorry]

Nice one Sir and much apologifications for missing it first time. Not sure if its intentional or kowinkidink, but this reminds me of camille, or la traviata if you're posh. Think that Alex Dumbass wrote it, but may be wrong.
If i remember correctly by my enforced reading of a hundred booksto read before you die... (and yes, it nearly killed) her seven lovers visited her on white flower days, but not on red, as that meant she was on the... Thing I know nothing about and neither should I.
Don't remember much, other than her name wasn't camille and she was well up for it... I think they played scrabble all night or somefink.
Phew, got through that without saying it soundslike every woman I have ever known... Uhm, gotta go, before I get hashtagged. 😀

[Neville]

Hey, no need to apoligificise .. it happens.. I can see the resemblance too sir... dont worry about being #tagged I got ya back covered..... 😀

[barleygirl]

D****t! I'm starting to get a complex when I read your writing lately! It seems every poem I've read in a row is about ME! As soon as I read this title, I was already communing with your message in a big way. I've always wanted to write something like this: "I've been a s**t, but I loved every one of them, warts & all!" But now I don't need to figure it out, becuz you approached this in an even better way! *nuggified smile* Fondly, Margie

[Neville]

Ah' but who luv's ya baby... we all do, and I do the most so keep out of it Gee, just in case ya snoopin around there here parts.... Bless ya Margie... x

[θεά]

Acerbic and non-apologetic. You know even brutal honesty in a time of hypocrisy is revolutionary. Love the rhyme scheme too Nevill!

[Neville]

That's me, right down to the bone, although on those very rare occasions when I have indeed been proven wrong, I have made a point of apologising.. just not always to the implicated individual... thank you Mallika.... Neville

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Yeah linear cohen. That's why I thought when I read title. Have quiet mood of his artistic heart. I can hear melody in hot night

[Neville]

I suspect there may be a compliment hiding in there somewhere, cheers.....N

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Oh yeah you feel right. I really like that.

[Neville]

Cheers....N

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You welcome

[Justine]

Oh you have no idea how this impacted on me. A superb write. I don't think I can comment further on this - need to digest it a little more. Justine

[Neville]

Take your time and be sure to let me know how your digestive juices finally work out

All Good Things, Just Justine my Friend,

N