Welcome

 

Welcome to the most critical stage

Of your very own decay

To that certain point of beauty

That will never leave you, fade or go away

 

Take note then and log

Each individual crease, line, bruise, fault and tear

Though exercise some caution

And always be aware

 

Since those who care too much for beauty

Tend to lose themselves in mirrors

And degrade in their own inimitable way

Reviews

[lee von cleef]

I stand degraded ,I have today been thinking of the same, not quite,a friend , a platter,a horse shoe putter on type guy, in my mind he is much older then me,I look at him he looks much older then me,in my mirror who am I? then in the obituary I read there is the two year difference,tough to get my parabola to start at the o origin,I guess I should of started at C, or spread the peanut butter on both slices before the jam is spread.O K goofy I am ,Alive.

[Neville]

We all do, in time. N

[Nightfall]

well, what to say about this one, it's a nice piece i'd say....


welcome is welcome,
are ya depend on your LIC or any kinda panssion,
don't be in tension, the life is one so live it without tension,
your welcome..."say every one who come in your life,
& if leave then don't take ..............!!

yea...hhh you dot it...what i wanna say.....

[Neville]

Thank you Varun, thank you very much. N

[Samuel Dickens]

So very true. I could give a good example, but mustn't mention my ex-wife's name.

[Neville]

Ha ha, no you must not, many thanks for your comment Sam. AGT's neville

[Bare Trees]

The inevitable way that can't be stopped. Aging truly is slow decay. Great writing.

[Neville]

Your comments are greatly appreciated, many thanks, Neville

[Damien Davison]

Nice poem about aging, welcoming you to the decay a degrading of your being. I enjoyed it. Good job.

[Neville]

My pleasure. N

[Kim]

Cool poem! I love the first two lines - they really grab the reader. My only editorial suggestions are these: to my ear, the last line of the first stanza is a bit unbalanced. Maybe you could eliminate a syllable? I felt the same way about the second line of the second stanza. But that could just be my internal rhythm talking. The only grammar thing is that "loose" in the penultimate line should be "lose." Great work :)

[Neville]

Hey Kim, many thanks for your review of this poem of mine. Your views are very much appreciated & I will amend in due course. Please read on & I will reciprocate. All Good Things, Neville

[New Dawn]

Ah the sudden arrival of liver spots and those creases around the eyes that remain even after you have stopped squinting - decay indeed - best just accept it gracefully lest you fall prey to botox and lose the ability of facial expression :)

[Neville]

Much appreciated both in terms of sentiment and advice. Many thanks, N

[Michael Soul]

fun read....................................................... sorry was at the mirror one min the hair's not sitting right....... .. ok what was i going to say? hay wife you got that face cream!!!! lol ( ok you're words rely has a cool feel to you work!!!!! ) i wonder how much time is lost in ore of ones own gaz ?
good work

[R J Askew]

O the frailty of flesh! Beauty is a great thing, but we obsess about it and then lose sight of it in our mania. I am definitely in the degrading stage and was never exactly beautiful. But that makes the degradation easier to accept. You made me think.

[Neville]

Much appreciated R.J and quite spooky too as I have been working on a poem that reads 'I was never beautiful but something in-between' Maybe we should form a cult. AGT's N

[R J Askew]

Beauty seems to freak some people out these days. Maybe it's the new smoking or something.

[The Refined Poet]

this was nicely crafted. the final stanza was perfectly done. I love, "Since those who care too much for beauty, Tend to loose themselves in mirrors" ... so true... well done

[Neville]

Good on yer R.P