What Do I Want From You

 

What do I want from you

Now you are gone away

 

I want to chase that mint

Around your mouth

With my tongue again

 

I want to trace my name

On your shoulder blade

With my thumb again

 

I want to probe and peek

Play hide and seek and to

Locate that long lost crumb again

 

These are but a few of the things

I want from you

Now you are gone away

 

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'What Do I Want From You'
Neville,
I think you had fun with this one. It shows the memory and it's life. The things, experiences that stick out in our souls when that time is gone. Relationships can be complicated of course but this writing gives permission to simply enjoy the little things which are not so small after all.
Blessings as always!
Kathy

[Neville]

Please excuse my late response to your very kind review note Kathy .. Much appreciated as always .. Blessings reciprocated and seasonal best wishes from me to you & yours .... N

[Samuel Dickens]

We do remember those little things, don't we? Your poem is intimate and pensive in it's revealing of those kinds of things that make relationships so captivating and desirable. They are another kind of "lost crumb".

[Neville]

You are of course absolutely correct Samuel & many thanks to you for considering these words of mine....Neville

[Ardra]

Sweetly painted the passion between two people... somehow it's the small things that you miss most... lovely poem.... :)

[Neville]

Thank you so very much Galadriel, I so much appreciate the visit................And yes, tis the small things we miss most.........Neville

[Nigel Newman]

Beautifully painted brush strokes of those 'our moment' memories and rituals which adorn long close relationships. I also like your maintenance of a structure and the repetition of the open 'u' sound to close each stanza. Nice work, and poignant.

BRs Nigel

[Neville]

Hey, I am so grateful for your visit Nigel, am lost for words, no kidding.....All Good Things, Neville

[barleygirl]

This is a brilliant peek into the seemingly insignificant interactions that form the glue for many relationships. Good choice of details fleshed out with fresh simplicity. This is the poster child for show instead of tell (first rule of good writing) becuz you're showing us that old nugget of wisdom about how we miss the little things the most! *sigh!* (((NUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Neville]

Hey Margie, I am lost for words & blown away by your ever so kind review, so will shut up and blow a x in your direction.........Neville

[Samuel Dickens]

Margie is one of the best reviewers I've ever seen. I wish I had one-tenth of her abilities in that regard.

[Neville]

Me too, I agree wholeheartedly........Neville

[barleygirl]

Awwww . . . gawrsh!!! I'm just lacking anybody to talk to, up here in my wilderness! *wink! wink!*

[Neville]

On my way, *nudge! nudge!*

[Neville]

Oh' yes I am...

[barleygirl]

You freakin' tease! If I ever got you alone out here in the wilderness, you might not be able to find your way back . . .

[Neville]

Gonna shoot myself in both feet write now, just to make sure ya catch me first........

[R J Askew]

Delightfully quirky, but this masks the yearning intimacy but thinly veiled by it. Reading it is like watching someone who is putting a brave face on things but is as close to tears as ..

[Neville]

Many thanks R.J, I very much appreciate your reading this & your take on it too. regards, N

[New Dawn]

This is a beautiful portrayal of remembered intimacy , it is the little things...
really enjoyed this Neville

[Neville]

Bless you Shelley, your comments are greatly appreciated. All Good Things, N

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hi Nev I have of course read this on our site but I still love it. Taking your reminicance down to very ordinary experiences gives it a 'lived in' quality. Have you changed it?

[Heather]

ohhhhh yes! Every stanza.. every one.. got me, made me smile, lingered and kept me transfixed. I loved how I could feel your wanting. This nostalgic piece is very well done!

[Neville]

Wow Heather, you just made my evening. Your comments are most welcome, many thanks & All Good Things, Neville

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hey Nev she's a sweet talker is she not lol!

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

What vivid examples that make me see and remember my own. Well done...it lingers.

[Neville]

Wow, thank you CAF / Shimmerbliss and I thought I was the only one out there. All Good Things N

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

Nope, we are many. :)

[Neville]

Phew, don't go away. N