The Argument

The Argument

 Having dressed in silence

The young couple finally

Decide to leave the rented room

And separate

The argument was over

...

Tomorrow a local girl

Will commit suicide somewhere

While in another empty room

A young man will search forever

For a single golden hair

...

Reviews

[Beren]

I think this is a poem that was written under the influence of your work. First of all, forgive me for taking you on a journey into the past, but I couldn't do it without reading your first poems. Even 13 years ago, your writing was so perfect that I (and probably most writers) could never match it, it gave me goosebumps. and your poem created such a strong impact with so few words that for some reason it immediately reminded me of "for sale baby shoes never worn". so short and effective.

Your poem is so deep that my eyes are filled with tears. Whatever else I say sounds empty.
It made me think about so many things, I don't know how long I've been staring into space and the last lines have been running through my head, but there are so many stories in my head. Would it be too much if I asked you for the reason behind your writing this to end my suffering?
just because I couldn't stop the story in my head...

[Neville]

Again you are far too kind .. Bless you Beren .. Neville

[Mrudula Rani]

You are master of minimalism. So much emotions packed in your poem..... to explain I will need a bundle of words. Silence between two people has such a tragic effect!! Beautiful writing! Uma abraço.

[Neville]

Our words must have crossed on the airwaves my friend, for mine were there & your'es were here and somewhere surely, they must have kissed......

[Mrudula Rani]

Thank you for painting the loveliest images with your words in my mind. Uma grande abraço.

[Neville]

And if you close those eyes & wish, it may appear X there tis, see..............

[Ghost]

We all have had an argument somehow somewhere.. I thing this was a close poem for so many people and their lives.. Thank you for sharing

[Neville]

Bless ya dear friend & poet & of course, my pleasure entirely.....N

[barleygirl]

I like the way you paint stark scenes in simple straightforward words to show the way misunderstandings can balloon into tragedy. This is a good example for the newer writers that often write about bleak scenes . . . this is how its done in an artful way, igniting our imaginations by understating the situation (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Neville]

Thank you so much Margie, I really do appreciate your time and encouragement (HUG) reciprocated, Neville

[Kathy Van Kurin]

"The Argument"
Neville Pettitt,
Contrasts of of life is what came to me when reading. Beginnings and endings are so real and many times harsh and unforgiving.
Silence can be so painful and bore into the soul:
"Having dressed in silence
the young couple finally
decided to leave the rented room"
A new thing will come for them and for others as well. Focusing on the coming loss and death is surly strong here"
"Tomorrow
a local girl
will commit suicide somewhere"
Memories so fond, remaining gossamer strand reality in the heart of the man has not changed:
"A young man will search forever
for a single golden hair"
Some things are so beautiful!
Blessings,
Kathy

[Neville]

Wow, I am absolutely delighted you found this old relic Kathy & thank you so very much for the lovely and well reasoned review..........Neville

[Lyn Anderson]

This is dark and devoid of hope. Searching, searching, endlessly searching.

[Neville]

Yes, it is quite sad. Thanks for considering it. N