Students

Students

We are both students of

Different forms of beauty

My lady labours in front of

Tall mirrors daily

To perfect her art

And whilst she is the most

Severe critic of each

Fresh line or blemish

She might find there

I practice daily

In a temple without mirrors

To remind me of all the

Women I have ever failed

To seduce with poetry

Reviews

[DarkArtz 0703]

"Severe critic of each
Fresh line or blemish
She might find there"
Everyone seems to be their own harsh critic. I relate to those three lines the most. Thank you for sharing although I was only 11 when this poem was posted I very much loved this piece. Thank you Neville for sharing this.
~ K

[Neville]

I am delighted that you considered breathing fresh air upon these otherwise dusty old words of mine my very newest of fine young literary friends .. many thanks indeed ..

Neville :)

[Starbaby]

Far better to polish up the mind and soul, for those outlive exterior packaging. My honest opinion is that if one's poetry is failing to seduce, the poet is whispering it in the wrong ear.

[Neville]

I see no point in cutting off ones nose to spite one's face .. so lend me thy ear .. I dubble dare ya :) but in the meantime, I thank thee for breathing some life back into these dusty old words of mine .. Neville

[William Michael Reeves]

I liked the twist of self esteem in this. Appreciating beauty hiding from your own beauty. Beauty tends to attract beauty so try hanging a mirror and see what she sees. Interesting that my latest poem happens to be about beauty. Connections keep happening the more I read in this cafe.

[Neville]

........ Ha, its a small world Bill & an even smaller Café sir .............. I am delighted that you found this oldie ... tis good to have someone breathe fresh air and throw some new light on them again .. N

[R.E. Ray]

Yet, we continue to try, sir! An interesting contrast here, and perfectly accurate from my experience. We project ourselves, while many women focus on covering blemishes. I humbly remain a student. :)

[Neville]

then you are a good man sir and this kenshi thanks you most humbly for it..... Neville

[Crowley]

I resemble this remark...lol. What a great piece Neville. You are a little like me I think, only better looking. Oh...and smarter. Probably a bigger penis as well. Still loved it though.

[Neville]

In all probability, you aint far off the mark Crowley sir and your insight, self awareness and honesty are only overshadowed by my penis.. Still love ya tho..... N:)

[Lydia Shutter]

Beauty is in the eye of the beholder though, right? We love words...we cherish them. Perhaps they will never seduce anyone but us and somehow that is just fine. Good concept here. Lydi**

[Neville]

Yes, beauty is in the eye of the beholder, only a fool would dispute that fundamental though universal law... Thank you for considering my words Lydi** .. Your impression and opinions are invariably welcome and appreciated..... Neville

[Robert Trakofler]

Ha Ha....The bunny couldn't seduce a doe with a fifty carrot pencil but he sure tries:) I like your temple that is my source of adore too. I think I fall in love with words and lines far more easily then with curves and finery. Very clever poetry in here Nev

[Neville]

Thank you Bad bunny.. tis all true & true...... Neville

[Edie Blue Starfish]

beauty is in the eye of the beholder, I know that's an over used statement but it's one that bears so much truth and we are on a constant path of learning one another when in a relationship so beauty often changes with discovery

[Neville]

Absolutely... and thank you Edie Blue Starfish... All Good Things,

Neville

[Einstein Noodle]

your title and theme hook and hold me ... certainly (and generally speaking) women do take far more cares in the mirrored image they want to present ... L7 enjambment ..i would break it at "..critic" and put "...of each" with L8 .. i think it would emphasis the intent of the line more ;) your turn in closing surprised me as ... the "man" looks in the mirror and sees the failed loves because of his poetry .. i look and clearly see why i can not seduce women :{ ... and Cyrano can be our hero in all this ... as excellent poetry will woo and win her heart and body when those looks of ours fail so terribly ... just my thoughts sir!
thanks for sharing ... :)
E.

[Neville]

Hey, Good Mane to ya our Gene.. many thanks for stopping by and taking a good hard look at this oldie.. it was the first poem I ever posted here.. your kind thoughts and suggestions too are appreciated and shall be seriously considered.. I promise ya sir.

Neville :)

[Einstein Noodle]

your first one!!! wow sir! i am so privileged to read it my friend... down yer neck buddy! :)))))))))))))))

[lightsong]

though I was thinking of another start for my review, but have to tell You that when I reached Your ending I giggled.

interesting piece my friend, the outside beauty and inside beauty... of course not only women care about the outside beauty, but I think here You wanted to show, that Your woman doesn't care about what You care about, that You see beyond her face, and how Your words the treasures to You, don't ring inside her, I'm sure it hurts so bad, on other hand, You speak about the appearance, and how it seems many are affected by what others may say about them, and their looking, while You, You sit with Your mind in Your own temple, not needing anyone's opinion, You know Your self, and You know Your inner beauty that doesn't need any mirror, but Your own mind's eye, and yes, the keep on learning how to raise it.

as I've said, really interesting piece my friend, thank You*

[Neville]

Well what can one say other than thank you for such an in depth analysis & the sharing of your own interpretation. Bless ya Light and may you always shine on............Neville

[lightsong]

Bless You too my friend, and You are welcome*

[Neville]

Hey, we are good then.....