Pool of Uncertainty

The rustling of leaves outside
Caused me to sleepily stir
Restless spirits know my address
Like soulless haute couture

I entertain the testimony of the demon
There is no comfort zone
I understand this now
Theres no way I would have known

One footprint

One drop of rain
In a pool of uncertainty
We quietly bear the pain
I could drown in this mediocrity

One moment
In this long silence disenchantment
Counted against the grains of contentment
Ill miss the laughter as I die

One heartbeat
Separates the dead from the sleeping
The grating of the need
Separates the sad and the weeping

I accumulate stories
And eye the demon for his desires
All creatures want something
Some wishes are for hire

 

Reviews

[Charles]

Another nice poem - good thread that moves the poem along quickly. I especially like the 5th stanza (one heartbeat...). not only are the expressed thoughts great, but it is the place in the poem that the rhyme is most natural (some rhymes seem a little forced). There are a couple of choices throughout that seem trite (bear the pain, sleepily stir) - maybe this is for the rhyme, but in comaprison to some of the fresh ideas herein, they stand out. Did I say I like the 5th stanza (OK, I know I did, but it bears repeating). That one stanza makes the whole poem fly. Very nice writing.

[Valentine]

Whew, I find this a some what downer poem, sad with no life or joy in it..I would hate to be this person in real life that can't see the beauty of the forest for the trees..lol and God bless..Kathie

[Michelle Lea]

This was a very deeply written piece (I love the wording), I really like it and can relate as well.... Uncertainty is a pain I think most people have experienced at one time or another in their lives. great write!!