Save me

Short poem.

I scream, but no sound is coming out

I break down, I smile and I don't shout

I cry, but the tears won't leave my eye

I say I'm fine, but it's all a lie

Fake smiles and unshed tears

Only you see something amiss

Broken souls and half hearted cheers

Please save me from all this

Author's Note

It's different from my usual stuff.. Please comment ^^

Reviews

[Eagle Cruagh]

I think movies and plays have been written on
this particular subject. Alone, ache, sad,
this is the way many of us feel when we are
not conecting, or unable to connect with a
like person.
Well written , thoughtful poem.
----- Eagle Cruagh

[Robin]

poetry that bares the pleading heart . honest writing

[ms. barrie]

great rhythm, very well written. i enjoyed this

[Geel]

one cannot be saved from the journey of life that we all embark upon the sadness and despair that we feel in those moments of being lost where are souls become weary with clouded visions and no direction to follow but some how in those dark moment we find the strength with in yourself and began to live again we began to smile again and our heart feels revived raw emotions is always where we grow one way or another good job

[HorrorMaster]

Very nice rhythm to this.

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it has a nice rhythm and rhyme and you have captured the feelings of hiding our true feelings behind smiles and knowing that there is someone who can see through your bravado..nicely done

[Daniel Gardner]

It is different but a great write non the less.

[YouoweYoupay]

Black, beautiful images in poetry and other writes are always welcome to my favourite list.

[lrigD]

You know, sometimes I really do worry about you, what with the poems you write... xD

[Coyote Poetry]

A very powerful poem. It is difficult to put your self together and begin again. I believe we must save our self. I like the feel and the emotion of this poem. Sometime all we need is a sweet smile and a lot of luck. A outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote