Black rose

another one of my poems

Your breathing

Barely heard

So beautiful

There is no word

Never certain

Always mysterious

Your look

So serious

It hurts

To touch

Though never too little

Never too much

You are

The one I chose

You are

My black rose

Author's Note

The picture is something I painted myself (okay I had an example on the computer screen..). But it's what inspired this poem.

Reviews

[sammyj]

I like this piece, keep going.

[Daniel Gardner]

Well the pic is good and the poem is good too. So I guess that makes this poem awesome. Great job.

[Haifa]

I liked it so much and its a wonderful poem. Well done, thanks for sharing.

[MissWordSmith]

I surprisingly liked this. when i began reading it i thought "not another 'trying to rhyme'" but it was really really good. the tempo was original, and refreshing and the idea of a Black Rose was fantastic. keep up the great writing!

[YouoweYoupay]

yet another poem describing/ picturing dark beauty and beauty of the dark. I loved it. thanks for sharing.

[Geel]

very sentimental and very beautiful

[Gomer LePoet]

nice painting, great poem. Is it about a lover or the rose? both need just the proper amount of stroking, never too little, never too much.

[Gionelly Kiss]

Wow...simple and beautiful...i like the simple rhyme and imagery.
I like particularly "It hurts to touch though never too little never too much." However, I feel that it should flow a little more...its too choppy. Maybe add a little more lyrical words. Otherwise, nice. Thanks for sharing. Keep writing.
gionelly*KiSS.

[HorrorMaster]

very good poem and sweet

[The Water Queen]

I love the way you placed your stanzas and how you made them flow very easily. I also love the intense imagery that you have projected throughout the entire poem as if to make the reader undstande what you are speaking of. You flow perfect and rhyme with ease. Great poem.