No longer there

Will people notice
When I've gone away?
And if they will...
What will they say?

 

When I'm long gone
When I'm no longer near
Who will care about me?
Who will show a tear?

 

Will people wonder?
Will people care?
When I'm gone
When I'm no longer there

Reviews

[Bran the Broken]

simple, effective.

[PaperHearts]

Very interesting. The feeling of questioning and doubt was something that I could really relate to.
I liked the rhyming, as it added to the flow of each of the lines.
At the end, I did come off feeling a little short. I think that you could expand on your idea a bit more, as there is potential there to be a really amazing piece.
However, a very heartfelt, relatable poem!
~PaperHearts =)