My Childhood Timeline

The memories you acquire from a childhood surrounded by cars..

I remember when I was five
I always wished that I could drive
my Barbie car was never enough
I wanted to drive the real big stuff
And I remember when I was seven
I always wished I were eleven
just a couple years away from driving a car
I knew back then that time wasn't too far.
And I remember when I was ten
and wishing my birthday would come around again
just thinking about starting to drive
made me think to myself what kind of car I should buy!
And I remember when I was thirteen
all I wanted was a car, nice and clean
a pretty blue mustang or a shiny black corvette
but my dad stood right up and said, " Those cars you can forget."
And now that I'm fifteen
I have a beautiful car, nice and green
then as I receive my permit I become over zealous
and can't help but think my five-year-old self would be jealous.

Reviews

[emmah]

this is a lovely, refreshing and sweet verse. it takes one through the childhood surrounded by cars, as you mentioned. it carves out the milestones in such brilliant clarity and expresses the innocent emotions in a very palpable palate.
and the end of the verse - brilliant again!
was an amazing read, this one! well done! :) :)

[Jong Schrijver]

Great job! The poem is great and has a nice rhyme scheme and was overall enjoyable to read.