Better Days

Just thinking about someone...

These days, without you by my side,

I feel so empty, gone is my pride.

I try to tell you that you are my life,

but you don't reply, you pay no mind.

And, being newly free, i'll try my best,

to move on past your absence.

And though we had a great run,

I have many better days to come.

Author's Note

Just off the top of my head...what do you think of it? does it make sense to you? Please tell me your thoughts.

Reviews

[deleted]

Very interesting. Sometimes we pour our heart out to the ones that we love and we thought loved us but they show us otherwise...unrequited love. The message behind the poem was very good. I think it will be nice if you add some descriptions behind the way that he ignores you and how it makes you feel (in dept). Overall, I enjoyed reading this piece.

[Darkness Eternal]

Yeah it makes sense. It sounds really good. It captures the feeling of being alone and lost, but having to move on nicely.