The Paths We Walk

In life there can be many paths to walk, but knowing whose you walk is sometimes hard. And can be harder when we don't want to walk someone else's path.

What if

I still don’t know

 

What if

I want to

Follow the other path

 

What if

I’m not

The norm

 

What if

I just

Want to be me?

 

Will

You say

It’s ok

 

Will

You support me

When I doubt

 

Will you

Allow me

This room

To grow

 

To become

The person

I could be

 

To explore

The options

I have

 

What if

I don’t want

To follow their path

But make my own

 

Will you

Still love me

Even if

I’m not great

The way they’re great

 

Cause I’ve followed

Your path

And I’m not sure

It got me

Anywhere

 

So now

Let me be free

To lead my path

And see

Where I go

Reviews

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~ this was like reading the mind of the poet... i love your unique take on lucid poetry... i'm not really a huge fan of ornamental poetry... i could hear this as a whisper that turned into an echo... ~ this is an ode to freedom... ~ i had to struggle so much with the notions of those who were constantly telling me what to do... ~ now i do what my heart says... and i'm infinitely happier than i was... :)

[Sunset Girl]

I'm so glad you were able to over come them, it's a battle I face to often from a life spent pleasing others. Knowing you're not alone in your feelings is the greatest power, and I've been blessed since sharing on here to feel that power. I'm hoping to follow my own path now. I'm sure that will be a big focus on my writings to.

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~ that's wonderful... and i do think that (like me) you'll love singing your own heart's heartsong... :)

[Jeff]

I liked the form. It worked for the thought process. I enjoyed this poem.

[Sunset Girl]

Thank you.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

An apt write indeed...it is difficult to imagine another person who is able to gently and unconfiningly get inside of your head and give the perfect support and guidance. I'm not sure I've ever found it. I like the idea of this one, because I can relate.

A little thought on the form...I found this very choppy. I understand the format, and sometimes these short lined pieces work quite well, but for some reason the flow in this one was a little lost to me. I felt stilted by the format, and thus unable to truly enjoy the meaning behind the words. Just my opinion, though :)

[Sunset Girl]

I'm glad you enjoyed. Everyone seems they know whats best for you (or at least the people in my life) and I find it hard sometimes for them to just let me do my thing without giving me the wrong type of feedback.
Thank you for your feedback as well, as a writer it's always good to get advice and critiques from others, as I believe it can only help you become better. I had a lot of thoughts I was trying to include here and wasn't sure on how. I welcome the feedback.